The ultimate hunger chapter one/ Dark Rebirth

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great_pimps

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Posted: Mon Jul 07, 2008 1:07 am

ill try got writeres block right now :P
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odinironforge

First Blood Posts: 7 Joined: 08 Dec 2007 183 gold

Posted: Mon Jul 07, 2008 2:07 am

If ive learned one thing studying writing and journalism is that when your writing a story provide as much detail on the characters appearance as possible while still telling the story. Also you should try and elaborate more and lenghthen the sequences, the fast speed makes it harder to become enthralled in the story. Great writing though!

great_pimps

Dominating Posts: 191 Joined: 14 Feb 2008 80 gold

Posted: Sat Jul 19, 2008 4:30 am

ok now i might start again soon lol
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TheGunslinger

Monster Kill Posts: 471 Joined: 25 Jun 2008 49560 gold

Posted: Sun Jul 20, 2008 9:37 am

Start. This was good, I just read it. Although you should make some references to the characters/landscape apearance through the story. Also, I dont like the fact that Traxex died. Sad

I was hoping for a romance beetwen her and Swen. Smile

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jpaulusmr

Killing Spree Posts: 58 Joined: 20 Nov 2007 1684 gold

Posted: Sun Jul 20, 2008 9:44 am

pls continue
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flameseeker

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Posted: Sun Aug 17, 2008 12:00 pm

ok. What u need to do is describe more. Great imagination and all is OK but what a story needs is descripton. W/O it ur story feels flat, like something said to som1. A story should have more feelings, like a movie. U get good authors like Rowling and Dahl because they describe well. Apart from that pretty good.
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