Spirits Within[Chapter 9]

Posted: Wed Aug 20, 2008 9:33 am

:O yesssssssssss it is a nice story.
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Posted: Thu Aug 21, 2008 3:59 am

Thanks all.
However, I have a small request for you all.
Can you guys help me think of a proper title for this story? =)...
Anyways, here comes Chapter 6. A bit boring, but a small hint for the future.
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Chapter 6. Tactics
“Nevermore, an awkward name…”
You won’t think of that when you encounter him personally.
“Elaine..?”
Yes?
“Is it certain that I must kill Abaddon to end his evil deeds? Can’t he be… Purified? Altered?”
There is a way… But with slim possibility…
“Tell me!” Purist gasped with excitement, “I’d like to know all the details for saving my brother from the Lich King!”
The host , can choose to banish the spirit from him… Spirits that oppose the host’s will shall be under torment until it follows the command.
“I don’t find that a slim possibility, though.”
Nalen, do you want me to leave?
“Of course not!”
There goes your answer.
“But that’s a different thing!” protested Purist, “I’m on the holy side! Why should I ban you for myself to join the Lich King?”
You will think this because you have already chosen your path. What would you think when you are already in the service of the Lich King?
Purist lowered his head in agreement. Elaine was much wiser than he was, obviously.
Suddenly, without a warning, the door burst open as an old elf came with rage. His eyes glaring at Purist as he stood with absolute pride.
Purist stood up and saluted.
“Furion! What made you came here for me?”
“And you dare ask! How foolish of you to attack the scourge alone with such a small squad!”
“I had business to do, as you see-..”
“No excuses, Purist!” Furion’s eyes seemed to burn with rage as he yelled at Purist, “Bah! Forget it! Come with me, we have important stuff to do,”
Purist felt relieved as he followed Furion down the dark hall.
When the reached the courtroom, Furion looked back at Purist.
“Then I’ll get back to you when we are done with this,” snarled Furion.
“Whatever…” muttered Purist, as he pushed open the door.
In the courtroom lay a large round table. Premium looking seats settled around. Almost all the chairs were occupied by the greatest warriors. Seeing that 2 chairs were vacant, Purist and Furion sat down.
“We were ready for a surprise attack to the Scourge, Purist…” Zeus started, “However, your foul decision cancelled out the movement,”
“Stop it! Don’t make direct comments on me like that while you don’t know my motive!” exclaimed Purist.
“Why, we know… You wanted to put all the glory on yourself…” stated Zeus.
“That’s not my motive!” Purist slammed his hammer on the table. Luckily, the table was strong enough to hold. “It is… My brother, no, Abaddon… Has joined the Lich King’s side. I was not sure if it was true, so I seek for it,”
The room fell silent as Purist strapped his hammer.
“Then, tell me, Purist,” a gruff Satyr stood up, “Why didn’t you inform the council before you took action?”
Purist almost laughed. Rikimaru’s voice was just not suitable for his small size.
“Well, I…” Purist was stuck.
Tell them that you wanted to take him down personally, before Abaddon causes more trouble. Promise them that you won’t do it again.
As Purist repeated Elaine’s words, the council all grunted with satisfaction.
“Now, since the Scourge is fully aware of attacks… We must devote most of our forces into battle.” Suggested Zeus.
“Purist, Mirana, and I will lead the army.” A scratchy voice came from the far end of the table.
Hmm… Interesting… said Elaine.
What’s so interesting?
The ranger that just talked, she once had a Shadow Fiend in her. She forced the spirit to leave…
So there is a possibility!
Purist looked at the Drow Ranger, unable to hide a wide grin.
“Then we shall analyze the battle plans,” said a Centaur, “We won’t win by charging into their mouths,”
“Jakiro will lead his fellow dragons for an ambush. Purist and the others will do the first strike.”
The councilors drew closer as they discussed their in-depth tactics…

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Posted: Thu Aug 21, 2008 4:03 am

nice story,
i wonder what will happen next...
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Posted: Thu Aug 21, 2008 4:42 am

i like the part where the drow speaks up. there is hope ^.^

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Posted: Thu Aug 21, 2008 5:40 am

How about calling it:
"Brothers in arms"
"Demons and angels"
"Spirits Awakening"
"Possession and Influence"
"Spiritual endeavors"
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Posted: Thu Aug 21, 2008 6:31 am

Thanks KingV, I'll put those into consideration. However, I'd like to hear more.

Note: Should I make this a sad story, or?
I really don't know, your choices will alter my writing. =)

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Posted: Tue Aug 26, 2008 1:05 pm

No reply? =/
Here's Chapter 7.
Been long..
Kind of "rushed" due to the fact that I'm busy, playing DotA.. >.>
And school's about to start.
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Chapter 7. Strike!
Purist stood at the top of the hill, looking down at the plains as the army of the Sentinel marched on.
“What a vast parade,” Commented Mirana.
Vast… Said Elaine, You would think puny once you meet the Scourge
Purist chuckled as Elaine talked, but couldn’t help feel a very chill crawling up his spine.
“Let’s go, Mirana. We wouldn’t want to just sit here and watch the
fight,” said Purist as he started to ascend to the front line. Mirana followed.
“Is everyone ready, Captain?” Purist asked a soldier with golden trimmings on his armor. He was the new captain, rumors about him spread throughout the Sentinels. Some even say that he is an elder dragon morphed into a humanoid, thus giving him the nickname – Dragon Knight.
“Of course, Purist, you can trust my command. I’m new, but not inexperienced,” Although a mere captain, Dragon Knight takes equal pride to anyone.
“Very well, Davion,” Purist nodded and went to another group for confirmation.
“Men! Do you hear me!” shouted Davion, while raising his golden sword.
“Let’s crush those wretched undead!” shouted a soldier. All the others roared in agreement.
Then suddenly, the earth began to shake violentely.
“Earthquake! Damnit! Why does it have to come at this time!” said a soldier.
“Bah, don’t worry, the quake will shatter the skeletons’ bones,” joked another.
“This is not an earthquake, men,” Davion turned around to face the plains. “It is the undead, prepare yourselves!”
Nobody responded as they watched the vast army of white rumble downwards. The quake stopped as the massive army halted. A hooded necromancer went up in front of Davion.
“Hello..Captain…” the Necromancer said in a hissing tone, “The Lich King Ner’zhul gives you a second chance, young one. Surrender, and serve as a slave, if not prepare to face the wrath of the-“
The necromancer was unable to finish his sentence as he stood, burnt.
Davion put his Helmet back on.
“By the name of-, he IS a dragon! We have hope!” cheered a soldier.
Davion sniffed, “Don’t let your hopes light up yet, men. We are still outnumbered at least 20 to 1,”
Davion lifted his head. There stands a Knight, with a wicked-looking sword.
“Ahh… You call that an army?” Abaddon stood out from his own, looking stronger than ever, every step he takes leaves a black mark on the ground.
“Charge, minions! Destroy them!”
Abaddon pointed Frostmourne towards Davion as a set of cavalry charged towards them.
“Wedge formation!” yelled Davion as he took the lead to the front, others following him from behind, forming a “V”. As the two groups collided, the cavalry was easily “Pierced” into half by the wedge formation, leaving each side vulnerable for cutting and slashing. Not long after, all the undead cavalries fell, leaving the soldiers unharmed.
Davion smiled.
They have advantage, the enemy has underestimated him.

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Posted: Tue Aug 26, 2008 1:27 pm

fhouw!!!! nice story dude!!!!
plz cont... nice 1...
u asked me 2 wait 4 pics....
may i know when is it goin to be posted??\
cant wait...
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Posted: Tue Aug 26, 2008 1:32 pm

Hrm? Check it at Heroes section? o.O
Thanks for the comment.

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Posted: Tue Aug 26, 2008 11:19 pm

i absolutely love this story
very enrapturing.
please continue!
can't wait....=)
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Posted: Fri Aug 29, 2008 1:42 pm

Little comments..D:
But still thanks to my readers!
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Chapter 8. Fiend
“We underestimated that young Captain…” Abaddon heard a soothing tone beside him, along with the same icy chill.
“Damnit! Kel’Thuzad! Stop creeping around like that!” Abaddon swung around, a tall figure stood beside him. He was the Lich, feared by most. It is said that his very chill can freeze bones itself.
“Ready the necromancers, we have much work to do…” Kel’thuzad ignored Abaddon and moved on.
Abaddon looked at the new captain, noticing that Davion too was examining the undead.
“I’ll go and take this guy down myself! He will pay for destroying our cavalry forces,” snarled Abaddon as he walked towards Davion.
Davion, noticing the Death Knight’s motive, walked towards him too.
If it’s a fight he wants, then it’s a fight he gets.
Abaddon snickered as the two met.
“Well, captain, you expect to kill me alone?”
Davion said nothing as he pulled up his sword and prayed to the Heavens.
If I shall die, I shall die in glory.
Dragon Knight slashed his sword towards Abaddon. Abaddon laughed as he ralleyed the blow easily. Davion sensed a bone chilling frost expanding through his whole body as his sword met Frostmourne.
He looked at the wicked sword.
What kind of necromancery is that!
Seeing the process, Abaddon grinned.
“Frostmourne hungers for your blood, captain.”
This time, Frostmourne takes the first move. At first Davion could parry the blows off, but everytime when he strikes Frostmourne, the chill makes him tired, makes him sleepy, makes him want to return home. Until finally, Frostmourne caught between his defenses and punctured Davion’s armor.
How can I lose to this traitor! Thought Davion I must… I must…
“I must defeat you!” An alien sound rang through the whole battlefield. Every single organim looked up at the sky, watching a big blue dragon arouse.
“If it’s frost you like, then frost you get!” Every word Davion said was followed by an ice boulder burning with cold flames.
Abaddon grinned, it was the perfect chance to let Nevermore extend his skills.
He pointed Frostmourne to the sky, as Nevermore started to morph into its shadowy figure. The ice boulders charged towards Nevermore was absorbed once it made contact.
“Feel the power!” laughed Nevermore as he let out a powerful energy towards Davion.
The dragon howled with pain as he fell to the earth.
“Hmm, I expect more for an elder dragon, captain, I wasn’t amused at all,” With Nevermore morphed back into him again, he raised his sword, ready to end the Dragon’s life.
Clash! Frostmourne struck Purist’s holy hammer.
“Hello again, Purist,” Abaddon did a quick glance at the dragon to make sure that he was no longer a threat, “Are you ready, to die this time? Your spirit won’t save you this time! No… Not when Nevermore is with me!”

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Posted: Fri Aug 29, 2008 1:53 pm

I love it. i'm out for a couple of weeks so when I return I hope i get to see the same good writing that i saw up until now. good job
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Posted: Sat Aug 30, 2008 4:11 am

Nice Chapter...
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Posted: Mon Sep 01, 2008 9:54 am

Whaaaaat!!!!!!! No chapter 9 yet?
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Posted: Mon Sep 01, 2008 10:56 am

Please be patient.
The courses I'm taking in school is making me very busy, but I promise it'll be out in a few days.

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