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The World and I (Updated to Part 8)
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Total Votes: 35
How do you want the story 2 end?
No ending time set.
Keep it a mystery 37% [ 13 ]
Actually get defeated by the 5 2% [ 1 ]
Gets stuck in the past 5% [ 2 ]
Dazzle Dies of some random illness 8% [ 3 ]
Don't end you bastard 45% [ 16 ]
The World and I (Updated to Part 8)
Posted: Wed Nov 05, 2008 4:48 amHello fellow members of DS. This is my first FanFic and I hope you guys enjoy my writing style. I got the inspiration for this story from the book “ Soon I will be Invincible” by Austin Grossman
For the sake of the story, the world of DotA will be referred as Earth. Also there will be foul language in this story. Not that I don’t have the vocabulary to substitute the words for more profound language… it just adds to the atmosphere IMO.
PART 2 IS ON PAGE 2
PART 3 IS ON PAGE 3
PART 4 IS ON PAGE 4
PART 5 IS ON PAGE 5
PART 6 IS ON PAGE 6
PART 7 IS ON PAGE 7
PART 8 IS ON PAGE8
The World and I
Phase 1
The World Today
This morning back on planet Earth, there are ninety seven gifted or otherwise “superpowered” beings. Of these ninety seven, four are retired; “The gambler”, “Old Naix”, “Old Silencer” and the always mystifying “Old invoker” Of the ninety three that are still kick, forty seven of them are fighting against crime and the rest are fighting to commit them. Nicely separating the two sides into the sentinel and the scourge.
There are thirty three beings that depend on magic as their ultimate source of power. Thirty one of them depend on their amazing agility to shred people to bits. And there is always the other twenty nine weridos who use their muscles to brawl. I really don’t understand them.
Our of the thirty three who depend on their magical powers, nine of which have a IQ over 300; and I just happened to be one of them.
I really don’t know what makes me evil. I still cannot understand why I want to dominate the world so much. People tell me it’s a kind of sickness, I tell them to shut or I’ll blow their heads off. The only way I can explain why, is probably because when you and you alone stand on the top of the bell curve, you tend to do things less logical. Not saying what I do is unreasonable, every single part of my plans are carrier out in absolute perfection. I don’t even let the picoseconds go. However every time, when my master plan is just about to complete, something out of the ordinary happens. Perhaps it is true, good really does triumphs over evil. But I doubt that.
I have tried to take over this god forsaken world more times than you can say “evil genius master mind” in one breath without choking to death. I have tried to mind control, freezing the world tree, hold the fountain hostage, even tried to create an army out of NPC’s. All have failed, now I have lost everything. My girlfriend, my power staff, my freedom, and my under ground fortress. You see, the biggest problem is not my plans; it’s more the opposition and my allies.
Oh, I almost forgot to introduce myself. I am Dazzel, people call me the Shadow Priest but that is only a side job. Now back to the topic of why I failed so many times, even though I keep telling you I am a genius. On Earth at this moment, there is an epic battle going on. I say epic but it’s actually more passive than that. My side, the scourge has more chance at winning the prize for best looks than win this war. Each side has a “big five” The so called leaders of the pack. On the sentinel side they got Lina Inverse the Slayer ( Their captain), Zeus- Lord of Olympia, Squee and Spleen- The Goblin Techies, Kardel Sharpeye- The Dwarven Sniper, and last but not least Purist Thunderwrath- The Omniknight. On my poignant side we got, Kel’Thuzad- The lich ( The Captain), Balanar- The knight Stalker, Bone Clinks- The Bone Fletcher, Pudge the Butcher, Strygwyr the Bloodseeker.
I mean seriously, how do we compete with that? The sentinel got all the personality, looks and even their names are cooler. How do you pronounce Kel’Thuzad anyways? We are fighting with swords and shields while they got guns and bombs damn it! We have guys that are mentally unstable, mainly Bone Clinks…the guy is chucks bones at you, what is his problem? We have guys that is already tested positive with AIDS. We have a guy that eats people, how would you think that plays out in the media? Anyways, as incompetent as my leaders are they are still my leaders. I would love to blow they heads off... but that would create mass civil unrest. And also who will be there to take punches from the "big five"?
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Last edited by Flodian on Sat Nov 22, 2008 8:29 pm; edited 12 times in total
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This is pretty interesting... different in a way cuz of the first person perspective and the "modern" flavor.And I agree with the swearing -- It will further stress the point and add intensity.I suggest you proofread. There are A few typos and grammar checks.Nothing big enough to ruin the writing though. Please continue...
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Thank, sry for the typos and such.
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I think it's interesting. I like the first person perspective. However, since you are attempting to write first person perspective of a person with an IQ over 300 any grammar errors break the flow. If you proofread this will be a much stronger piece.
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lukeiskul wrote:
you spelled "dazzle" wrong.
you spelled "dazzle" wrong.
-_-... gimme a break it was late ok?
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I like it. But as the above few stated, check your spelling. But in terms of creativity and origingality, I'd give it 8/10. GJ.
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nice
im a big fan of fan fci so its nice to see more people attempting it! good job, just watch out for those pesky grammar issues ^^
cant wait for mroe

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@dohyun99 Lol its kinda ironic you say he needs to watch out for those pesky grammer issues when if you take a closer took at your post you will notice two grammer mistakes. Thats me attempting to make a joke

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[tfn]stR1d3r wrote:
@dohyun99 Lol its kinda ironic you say he needs to watch out for those pesky grammer issues when if you take a closer took at your post you will notice two grammer mistakes. Thats me attempting to make a joke
LOL @dohyun99 Lol its kinda ironic you say he needs to watch out for those pesky grammer issues when if you take a closer took at your post you will notice two grammer mistakes. Thats me attempting to make a joke
AHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!! lol, like i said, they are veeeeeery PESKY! ^^
haha, good catch

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this is really interesting... semi political rantings of a shadow priest... lol your work needs a counterpart, would u mind if i write one for the sentinels side?
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Lol damn dohyun99 i just checked again and i said took instead of look. Guess none of us are perfect

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hahaha!
yeah i guess so lol, no one is above the laws of grammar! xD
good times

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nuggetz wrote:
this is really interesting... semi political rantings of a shadow priest... lol your work needs a counterpart, would u mind if i write one for the sentinels side?
this is really interesting... semi political rantings of a shadow priest... lol your work needs a counterpart, would u mind if i write one for the sentinels side?
That would be awesome.
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[tfn]stR1d3r wrote:
Lol damn dohyun99 i just checked again and i said took instead of look. Guess none of us are perfect
Lol damn dohyun99 i just checked again and i said took instead of look. Guess none of us are perfect
Haha yes! and you spelled GRAMMAR wrong too

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