The Khans and the Moks - Centaurs

The Khans and the Moks - Centaurs

Posted on Tue Nov 18, 2008 11:55 pm

Chapter 1

On a cool summers day, the hunting season starts. The clouds, blocking the heat, made a very nice cold but humid climate. The centaurs from the east lived very complicated lives. Their ordinary lives have interfered with the Mok tribe, a different kind of centaur clan. All the Khan tribe has showed is hatred and separation. With all the discomfort, seeing each other will result in violent acts. A few battles of good men have happened, and since then they haven't tried stopping. This caused outrages and further leaded to avenging one another. The western tribe are peaceful and caring, but the Khan tribe is all out rude and aggressive. This caused the Mok tribe to be the same.

It was hot and humid on the forest floor. The Khan tribe had started to hunt for animals and critters. They were also alert for encounters and beasts, but really with the Mok centaurs as they have also set in the woods to hunt. One thin in common between the two is that they hailed the mountain that separated both of them.

He peered around the with sharp eyes, looking for the rabbit he saw in the bush a few minutes ago. He heard a rustle and brush of the leaves, and there popped out a white rabbit, dashing out swiftly. The centaur backed up a little so he could run for it. He was boosted by his back hooves and galloped away. He had hoped to step on the rabbit before it could get out of sight. The centaur's ivory hoof stepped under a root of a tree. His foot was wrapped in vines,causing him to trip. He shuddered and rolled over in an instant.

"Bradwarden" a voice called. The centaur was painfully bruised at his muscular stomach. He couldn't speak as he was regaining his strength and breathe. His friend laughed in a very deep voice.
"You know you can't catch a rabbit"
"Oh shut up Axel. Go and hunt somewhere else. I tell you, this is the way how real men catch their food. Sometimes we make mistakes." Bradwarden replied as he hauled his heavy body up.

He heard something. It was like a voice in his head. The centaur heard something very feint. He thought it was peculiar and odd. Bradwarden walked around the tree to inspect. No one was there. Nothing but the birds singing and the rushing stream. It was behind him. He turned around quickly, opened up his shoulders and hacked up whatever was behind him. But he only found his huge axe to be stuck in a tree. He could now make out what the voice was. It was a giggle, of a girl. The sound was gone, until he heard thumps and galloping.
"Bradwarden! Lets go!" Axel said as he ran off back towards the village. Bradwarden turned around. He sighted a few centaurs racing with scary weapons. One of them he had recognized. Marvin, a leader from the Mok tribe. Bradwarden ran with incredible speed. Weighing over half a ton, centaurs ran two times faster than horses. The centaurs came to a stop after losing them.
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Posted on Wed Nov 19, 2008 12:01 am

a few centaurs racing with scary weapons.

Good one lol.
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Posted on Wed Nov 19, 2008 12:06 am

i KNOW this is going to be epic, so i cant wait!

GOOD JOB!!! WOOT WOOT! just watch out for some typos
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Posted on Wed Nov 19, 2008 12:23 am

I know flodian.. What a poor description.

I wrote this up out of boredom at 12 am last night. Couldn't sleep..

I could of come up with a better thing than that...

Btw to all story readers, there are no more delays to the next chapters because, I've got the whole plan of the story out so I don't have to make up stuff any more. Btw, what kind of theme do you think this story's going to be? romance/action/comedy etc. Foreshadow it... Next chap in the next 1/2/3/ days.
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Posted on Wed Nov 19, 2008 12:27 am


No it wasn't really a criticism, I just wanted to know what the scary weapons were lol.
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Posted on Wed Nov 19, 2008 1:17 am

@above

Orochi's face


jk haha... dont ban me! >.<
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Posted on Wed Nov 19, 2008 1:32 am


lol. dohyun99 has been band on the account of false accusation.
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Posted on Wed Nov 19, 2008 6:06 am

Centaurs and Romance doesnt fit, DM! But comedy?? Hmmm.. If ur idea is epic-like, then dont deviate from action..

If not, i would LOVE to see centaurs and comedy
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Posted on Wed Nov 19, 2008 6:14 am

@dohyun99
I want to see Orochi's face.m exited..lol
OMG, i hope Mr Orochi will not ban me for this post.
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Posted on Wed Nov 19, 2008 6:17 am

U can see Orochi at ds.net man, in all his glory
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Posted on Wed Nov 19, 2008 11:12 pm

or in all his un-glory

anyways, a romance might be hard to pull off but it could be great if it works out
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Posted on Thu Nov 20, 2008 4:17 am

Hey Dohyunn, u are a feature in the chapter chain now (So was Orochi but got killed..sigh)
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Posted on Fri Nov 21, 2008 12:12 am

yeah i know lol, im the one who put myself in it! ;lol:

@topic

good luck with whichever path u decide to take this story in!
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