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Time,Time, Time. -Falling Apart. Conclusion is up!!!

Posted on Sat Feb 28, 2009 6:08 am

This is my First Fanfic. Ever. So, i'm not sure if it'll suck or not. But, I do ok in Descriptive writing at school so, here goes.

PROLOGUE

The evening air had grown still as he walked past. The very fabric of reality seemed to bend around him, but he trudged on. Seemingly unfazed by his effects on the nearby areas.
For this man, was no man at all. He Was the Faceless Void. A being free of emotion, feeling, or pain. He cannot be killed, for even if death is certain, he simply steps back in time and attempts to change it. And he can do this over, and over, until either he gets away, or the pursuer is dead.....His hand, only stilled by God himself, has stricken down many of the Sentinels Ranks, and because of this, a Bounty has been given for the Faceless Void. 6000g for the one who brings back his mace, and his head. And as such, the one and only greedy Drainei, takes the bill, with an excited smile on his wrinkled face. As he and his group set out, in search of the Dreaded Darkterror, the die has been cast, by fate itself, that The Faceless Void, will meet his end by one month's time.....

Sooooooooo, whaddya think?

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Posted on Sat Feb 28, 2009 6:18 am

Pretty good..keep it up

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Posted on Sat Feb 28, 2009 6:33 am

nice xD
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Posted on Sat Feb 28, 2009 6:41 am

TOOO shoort!
Nice prologue
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Posted on Sat Feb 28, 2009 6:54 am

Pretty good Prologue, continue!
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Posted on Sat Feb 28, 2009 6:55 am

lol someone voted no.
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Posted on Sat Feb 28, 2009 12:07 pm

thanks for the compliments. Im at a friends house, but ill try to do chapter 1 when i get home.

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Posted on Sat Feb 28, 2009 12:13 pm

wow real gud man go on
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Posted on Sat Feb 28, 2009 12:26 pm

Good job with the prologue, good description of the Faceless Void.This should definitely be continued.
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Posted on Sat Feb 28, 2009 12:34 pm

The bounty is too low i think
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Posted on Sat Feb 28, 2009 12:53 pm

6000 too low!?that freaking high amount of gold!U must be a rich guy arent u? XD

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Posted on Sat Feb 28, 2009 3:17 pm

ooookayyyyy. back from the house, (and back from an interesting game w/ tinker...*shiver*)and ive been itchin to write this down. sooo, here!


CHAPTER 1

The Group that the Bounty Hunter has had since his days as a rookie, was simple, yet feared by criminals and outlaws across the land. It consisted of Gondar, the Bounty Hunter himself. It also contains a former Knight of Lordaeron, Davion. Including Rikkimaru, a Prince, of the fallen Satyr Kingdom. Yurnero, an Orc trained in the ways of the blade. And Jah'Rakal. A young warlord, who wishes to prove Trolls are the best fighters in the world. Together, this Elite Clan of Hunters has removed several of the Scourge's numbers from play, and they are considered a large reason of the Sentinels success in fending off the Scourge. All hunting mainly for their own reasons, they have but one common goal: to stop the undead legions of the Scourge from bringing their influence upon the people of the world.

Leaving the tavern that the terrified villager posted the bounty in, the group came outside to find an exhibit. An exhibit of an abomination . This was Pudge, the Butcher. He had been captured by a war band, and was sold to this man, only looking for a quick profit from charging people to look at it. Pudge banged the bars of it's cage, bellowing a guttural roar that could shatter even the strongest of spirits. As the band of hunters walked closer, the Abomination noticed the wound in Jah'Rakal's left knee, and screamed "Ahh, Fresh Meat!". Bewildered by it's statement, Jah'Rakal was caught off guard by the hook that the Butcher had sent, and as it connected with his stomach, Pudge pulled it with all of his might, and it sent the Troll crashing through the cage bars. Rikkimaru had rushed to help, in an instant, he had blinked into the cage. As Jah'Rakal bashed the abomination in the head, Rikkimaru was ramming his curved blade into its back, all the while The Butcher was feasting on the young Warlord. "Ahhhh!!!!!!" Jah'rakal screamed in pain, as the Butcher's teeth sank harder, and harder into his flesh.

Meanwhile, the Darkterror had seen the Nerubian Weaver, named Anub'Seran. The Weaver, being tied to Time as much as the Faceless Void. And the Darkterror channeled a thought into Anub'Serans mind. "Do you have a minute to answer a question?" Anub'Seran snarled back in his usual eloquent tone, "Of course. I have all the time in the world." Darkterror replied,"Do you feel that the flow of time is being distorted?" Anub'Seran answered,"Well, I have felt that it was being wrinkled a bit, every time that I would interfere with something, but I never paid attention to it until now. Why do you ask?" Darkterror sent back,"I don't know...For once in my existence, I have stumbled upon a question, that I didn't have the answer to...It seems as if my control over the essences of time have weakened as well. I can't stop time from bending around me, and I feel a great calamity approaching not only the Sentinel, but all of existence." The sentence had made Anub'Seran tremble the thought of what could happen, for even though he puts on such a fierce demeanor, he is actually quite a coward, always running away in battle, and only relying on trickery to win. "Do you mean..." Darkterror replied, "Yes, yes I do..."



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Im bored, its late, and I have nothing else to do. It means....chapter 2!


CHAPTER 2

The shocked crowd huddled around the cage as the abomination ate the poor warlord alive. As he shrieked in pain, the rest of his fellow bounty hunters broke through the cage, and proceeded immobilize the beast. "WROAAAAAA!!!!!!!!!" The Abomination bellowed. It's arms, flailing ever so wildly, bashing Gondar into the cage wall, and Yurnero onto the ground. Davion leaped at the Abomination, and with a swift bash of his shield, the Abomination dropped Jah'Rakal, and gave the Hunters a chance to strike. As Jah'Rakal lay near lifeless on the cage floor, Davion let out a swift breath of fire that blasted away the bars of the cage. Rikimaru carved the beast's back, as Yurnero proceeded to slice it to bits. Gondar, having taken the beasts attention as this was going on, is reasonably tired from evading the behemoth's swings. All huddling around Jah'Rakal, hunters, and townsfolk alike, ask but one question: will he live?

Furion paced the floor of the Elders Chamber, discussing with them, asking exactly how would they avert the crisis. "The flow of time through our world is being shaken, and like the trees, it is sturdy, but a powerful enough storm will uproot it." Said Chen, The Holy Knight. "Perhaps a summoning could counteract, this.....thing." Inquired Rooftrellen." "Perhaps" said Furion, "Perhaps. Or, it could hasten this calamity's coming"

Taking him to some of the best healers in all of Azeroth, the Hunters found little, to no luck... After finding that Huskar, Aistusha, and even Purist cannot help him, the band of Hunters is running out of time. After hearing word from Huskar that there might be a person who can help them. A troll in fact. But the heal comes with a price. The healer's name is Vol'Jin. And he is a follower of the Lich King......

Darkterror sat in the darkness. Waiting for a sign, an epiphany, anything. Anything that would change the events unfolding. A way to stop that star from burning out.....Because that star is no regular star, this was the star, named by Furion: Enigma.

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Posted on Sat Feb 28, 2009 8:14 pm

WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOH!!!

another fan fic!!! yay!!

nice one! continue it! and yeah, ur descriptions are pretty good

cant wait for more ^^
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Posted on Sat Feb 28, 2009 8:45 pm



That says it all.
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Posted on Sat Feb 28, 2009 9:44 pm

lol seems like you read a lot of fantasy and are just coping the generic style

sorry to be the only negative one
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