Dota-Allstars:Director's Cut

Dota-Allstars:Director's Cut

Posted on Tue Apr 28, 2009 12:29 pm

Since that the title doesn't seem very attractive, I changed it but the story will still be the same.

Chapter 1:That's a Wrap!!!

GODlike!!!!
Player 1 just pawned Player 2 for 250 Gold.
Player 1(Omniknight):Man i'm Good...I pawned you again using Omniknight...you're so noob.I'm out.
( Player 1 just left the game )
Player 2(Night Stalker):I hate This...I'm out.
( Player 2 just left the game )

After a few minutes.....

Director :Are they Gone?
Staff 1 :Yeah...Think so?
Director :OK GUYS THAT'S A WRAP!!!Pick up the dead bodies and put it close to the Fountain of health so it can regenerate cause will use it in the next game.*Leaves his chair and Goes to the Sentinel Lounge room*Knock*Knock*
Omniknight :Who's There?
Director :Hey Chuck(a.k.a Purist Thunderwrath) It's me Kael(a.k.a Director) let me in!!!
Chuck :Oh! come in!,come in!
*Door opens up*
Chuck :I was just cleaning the prop blood from my costume.So Director anything i can do for you?
Kael :Just stopping by to check on you and..Oh!BTW you did a good job back there,You made that Kid feel pretty good after winning against Night Stalker.
Chuck :Thanks...I always try to give my 110% when i'm on the scene.*Scratches head while smiling*
Kael :Before i forget you should work on the swing of the hammer of yours.It always looks like it will go flying and really hit one of your co-actors.Better fasten your grip boy before something bad happens.Got That!?
Chuck :Ok sir i'll try to fix my grip.
Kael :You should go now, You still have enough time to linger before your next shoot..eh..Scene starts.*Leaves the Sentinel Lounge room*
Chuck :I'd better go check Bobby(a.k.a Balanar) and see if he's up for some Salve.*Leaves the sentinel Lounge room and heads up to the Scourge Lounge Room*

While chuck was on his way to the Scourge Lounge Room, he met a Co-actor named Jimmy(a.k.a Nessaj) feeding his horse named Richy.

Chuck :Hey jimmy, how's it going.
Jimmy :Not much just feeding my pet here because were going for our next shoot with Lina(as herself).I hear there will be pro users playing.
Chuck :Goodluck on the scene man.Hope you make a Killingspree!!*Continues to walk to Scourge Lounge Room*

Meanwhile on the Scourge Lounge Room...

Bobby :Didn't i always tell you to put more sugar on my coffee!!!I can't run as fast i should be if i don't have my sugar!!!Can't you follow a simple order like that!!!You Stupid assistant!!!*Yelling while showering lots of spit at Dirge(as himself).
Dirge :Soooorrrrrryyyyyyy....Haapppennn...nnottt..agggaaiiinnn...uuuuuggggghhhhhhh!!!!
Bobby Frustrated:If your not just free service i'll kill myself ugh!!!I need a brake.
Dirge :Where...gggooooiinggg????
Bobby :To the Wonders Brothel at Sentinel Camp to get some Salve.Need a breather.

To Be Continued......

There hope you like my very first Fan-fic.




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Posted on Tue Apr 28, 2009 12:38 pm

this is unique and cool but still DotA related.. i suggest you add some laughs to make this more interesting and somewhat "AmC-Dotaaddict-Like-fanfics" since you have a good plot and thats what excellent about this fan fic ..
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Posted on Tue Apr 28, 2009 12:41 pm

nice .. continue !
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Posted on Tue Apr 28, 2009 12:42 pm

I'll try to Squeeze in some of my Jokes from my collection for the next chapter.
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Posted on Tue Apr 28, 2009 12:53 pm



good .. some jokes will work just fine ..
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Posted on Tue Apr 28, 2009 1:18 pm

seeing that this is ur first fanfic, i think its pretty gud. for me, it just needs more humour
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Dota-Allstars:Director's Cut

Posted on Wed Apr 29, 2009 3:46 am

Chapter 2:Let's Drink!

Right after Bobby went out of the Scourge Lounge Room and headed to wonders brothel at sentinel camp...Chuck came to find that Dirge is crying because Bobby scolded him....

Chuck :Hey dirge why are you crying, is something wrong?
Dirge :Bobby....haaatttes...mmmmeeeeee......waaaaaaaa!!!!
Chuck :There,there Dirge *Rubbing Dirge's Back* It's ok.Cry,cry like a little baby you are!cry like there is no tomorrow!
Dirge :Waaaaaaa.....uuggghhhh!!!!....Waaaaaaa......Fuuuuuuu****k!!!!!
Chuck :I'll talk to kael and recommend you on Kitchen duty.Ok!
Dirge :uuuuuuggggghhhhh!!K!!

After comforting Dirge...chuck returned to the sentinel camp and found Bobby doing a body shot on mimie(a.k.a Luna Moonfang)
Bobby :Alllrriiight!!!!...Now that's some tasty salve right there!
Chuck :Bobby, How's it going!!!
Bobby :Chuck my good friend, come here have a drink!
*Kicks mimie aside and does a girly with hug Chuck*
Chuck :That's pretty awkward!?You're already drunk man and we still have a scene coming up.What were you thinking!?
Bobby :Don't worry Chuck i can handle myself.How about you i hear you were looking for me.*Calls for the bartender Ding(a.k.a Raigor Stonehoof)I'll have a cows milk please.
Ding :Coming right up sir!*Gets a glass and turns around and after a few minutes faces Bobby and gives the milk*
Ding :Here you go sir!Enjoy!
Bobby :Thanks just put it in my tab.
Bobby :*Turns and looks at Chuck*So Chuck why are you looking for me again?
Chuck :Well i was going to ask you to go for a drink but it seems you're already Drunk.So let's just talk about the scene before shall we.
Bobby :Oh! that well i really didn't like that scene from before.You saw how stupid the my player was, he keeps Fighting that stupid robot Roshan at level 6.I always die from that thing and you know that each time we die Kael deducts it from our salary, now i only have little money enough to buy me some salve.This is Bulls*it man!!*Ding stares angrily at Bobby*No offense man.
Chuck :It's a good thing my player was alright though, i gained a lot of money from him now i have enough to treat you for some salve and for some girls.So how about it?You up for some more round!?
Bobby :Are you challenging me on a Drinking contest!?
Chuck :If your up to it?
Bobby :Then you better get ready cause your looking at a pro right here!I've been winning drinking contest from left to right.Where do you think i get all the extra energy i have for running that fast when at night?
Chuck :I thought you get from all those sugar you've been drinking along with your coffee?
Bobby :Forget about it, Let the Drinking Contest Begin!!!*The Brothel suddenly turns Dark*

There hope you like my second chapter, i tried to put in some funny stuff but if you think it still needs improvement then comments and suggestions are welcome.

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Posted on Wed Apr 29, 2009 4:24 am

I just noticed you were typing "Brothel" the whole time. Lol.

Brothel=Wh*reHouse



Dammit you made me laugh.

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Posted on Wed Apr 29, 2009 4:36 am

LOL@
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Dota-Allstars:Director's Cut chapter 3

Posted on Wed Apr 29, 2009 10:36 am

I know there has been a fanfic about some of the DS users as characters and there have been many post and replies about how good it is, But i'm still going to continue making this Fanfic and try my luck if this story of mine can match the fanfic about "Yukochi FanFic".Here goes my chapter 3...

Oh!before i start chapter 3 here's a brief re-cap of the starting cast and crew.Soon there will be more cast appearing from the show and behind the Monitor/Camera.

Kael as the Director of "Dota-Allstars"-a Reality Show where people from different walks of life are forcefully put in danger in every shoot of the show.
Chuck as Purist Thunderwrath
Bobby as Balanar
Dirge as the personal PA/Co-star of Bobby
Ding as Raigor Stonehoof/Bartender of the "Wonders Brothel"
Mimie as Luna Moonfang/one of 7 Gals of "Wonders Brothel"
Jimmy as Nessaj

Now that's finished let's start with the chapter...

Chapter 3:Stupid Squeaky Hammer!!!

The Contest between Bobby and Chuck began...There were many audience, Many cheered Bobby *Mostly Gay people* while the Voluptuous Gals of Brothel Cheered and screamed for Chuck...
The Contest has ended and the winner is Chuck...But because of that contest they are now both very Drunk and can't even tell the difference between Reality and Fiction...

*Hick*!!
Chuck :Hey Bobby*Hick*let's Go It'S tImE fOr ThE*Hick*ShOoT*Hick*.
Bobby :Yeah,yeah i know*Hick**BUUUURRRRP**Hick*

Chuck and Bobby headed straight for the next shoot which is going to played by Semi-Pro players...

Kael :WTF!!!!Chuck!!Bobby!!!Why are you Drunk!!?Didn't i told you you still have a shoot!!!
Chuck :Don't worry we can handle our selves*Hick*
Chuck :Now wheres my hammer???....Oh! there it is...You boy give me my hammer or else i'm gonna give you a great big Facepalm!!!
Boy :But this is mine, I won't give it to you!!!
Chuck :WTF!!!you won't give me my hammer???Then eat this you MotherF**ker!!*Facepalmed the boy then kicked him and Batted him out of the set using the hammer**Squeak*WTF!!somethings wrong with my hammer???*Hick*Nah it's Ok it's just the Extra Grande Salve Kicking in...Let's start the show*Whacking the staff infront of him*.
Kael :Ok remember Chuck, Do exactly what the player tells you to do.Ok!!Bobby your also on this shoot so better pull yourself together Ok.
Bobby :*Stares Kael and starts Vomiting*K!!!
Kael :WTF!!! i'll deduct this to your salary Bobby!!Quiet on the Set!!!Ready the Creeps!!!Action!!!!

As Chuck and Bobby were running along their respective allied creeps...Chuck suddenly Got the urge to deny them....

Chuck :Taste This you Bulls**t creeps!!!DIE!!!!*Whacks the Guy inside the treant costume Unconscious*PAWNED*
Chuck :Eat that you feind!!!

Meanwhile on the players side....

Player 1:WTF!!!Omniknight just deny my creeps at full health!!!WTF is going on??? is this a Bug!!??
Player 2:You're not the only one experiencing it man...Look at my Balanar,he's humping Sena the Accessorizer!!!Stop that Balanar you go here on Mid and clash with Purist!!!

On the Dota-allstars reality Show.....

NNNNOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!....
Kael :your ruining the shoot get your selves together and do what the players tell you Goddammit!!!
Chuck :Hold it right there You evil fiend i'm going to defeat you in the name of the Giant Marijuana on the center of our stupid little camp!!!or my name isn't purist Fuc*erwrath...erhh...Thunderwrath!!!Taste My cold-steel hammer!!!!*Charges toward Balanar with hammer in his hands*
Bobby :Come and get me suckerrrr!!!!!*Runs like a wuss on the river while flapping his useless wing*Damn this wing of mine can't get him to fly me up on the moon!!!Good thing i'm really good at running!!!*Jogging in the same place really fast*Hehehe...You can't catch me now you overgrownpieceofchickendung!!!
Chuck :Now i got you!!!You shall now feel my awesomeness!!!Taste my power Fool!!!*Starts to chuck up massive amounts of vomit onto Balanars face*

Ok let's stop there for now...I'll make more stories tomorrow.Hope you like the third chapter of my Fanfic!!


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Posted on Thu Apr 30, 2009 12:43 am

lolllllllll nice story!

good stuff! waiting for mroe
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Posted on Thu Apr 30, 2009 5:07 am

I'll post the next chapter later.
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Posted on Thu Apr 30, 2009 5:23 am

Nice story!
DotA heroes 50% control for themselves!
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Posted on Thu Apr 30, 2009 5:29 am

@sinclare
^_^ thanks for complementing Yukochi
btw.. for those who doesn't know.. Yukochi means Yukino + Orochi.. Its there love story.. haha XD
oh.. another thing.. dont forget about Flo's Mystery Series... The comments about that surpassed mine >_<.. and its includes members too.. another fanfic of awesomness
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Posted on Thu Apr 30, 2009 5:46 am

Cool...
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How about mine?Is OK for a beginner like me?
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