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Action/Comedy- A Dota Story Remade!! Chapter 14 yay!

Posted on Fri May 15, 2009 3:51 am

Hi, Im kinda new here but i realy liked this fanfic,
so,i decided to remake it with more characters

Chapter 1 :Back to the Start

Horns blared, and the sentinels cheered as they prepared for war. This time they were going to win, they knew it. This was going to be their day. The Sentinels were lead by one of the best paladins ever known in the silver hand, Purist Thunderfart (Purist glances at me with angry face)err..
Tunderwrath and the muscular and strong Beast Master, Rexxar.

Purist: Darn noob fanfic writers,first is that idiot and now this.I hated it.

Rexxar: Nevermind, at least we can kill in this fanfic.

Purist: yeah yeah, start fighting.

So Rexxar threw his axes into the creep wave and killed some ghouls while purist uses his hammer to smash open skulls.

Later,when Rexxar tries to catch his axes he misses and the axes knocked Purist on the head and he fainted,just to be grabbed and put into a smelly old sack and shipped to neverland.

Purist:HEY! IM NOT A STUPID PETER PAN CHARACTER, AND THATS NOT IN THE STORY!

nginferno:Ohh, Sorry.

(rewind)

Later,when Rexxar tries to catch his axes he misses and the axes knocked Purist on the head and he fainted,just to be grabbed by Anubarak the eight foot beetle with spikes on his back to the scourge base.

Rexxar:oops.
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Posted on Fri May 15, 2009 5:02 am

welcome to DS. and btw, you could've just made a new one and have a new title instead remaking it. but its fine. ^_^
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Posted on Fri May 15, 2009 7:44 am

Lol...I'm flattered :P
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Posted on Sat May 16, 2009 12:33 pm

@AmC
haha.. you're story is so awesome to be ignored..
@Ngiinferno
yeah yeah.. good.. some humor and correct grammar does the trick.. but make it a bit longer.. because us readers like it longer so we have more to read.. but it doesn't necessarily mean that longer = more satisfaction... but i do suggest make it at least as long as AmC's fanfic..
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Posted on Sat May 16, 2009 2:12 pm

Wow, no copyright AmC?
LOL
Not bad for a first chapter, hope the nxt chapter comes soon.
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Posted on Mon May 18, 2009 1:03 am

Actually, i think im going to make this fanfic shorter for every chapter but more chapters.
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Posted on Wed May 20, 2009 1:50 am

Sorry, but this week had almost been the busiest week of my life,so I didnt even have time to go online.
Fortunately,I still have time to think about the stories and im going to post 2 chapters to compensate.

Chapter 2:The Torture Room

At the Scourge Base

Purist wakes up, and finds himself tied to a chair in a dark room.Anubarak walks in.

Purist:Where am I, in a prison?

Anubarak: Yeah, and Im the sheriff...OF COURSE NOT YOU IDIOT.
THIS IS THE TORTURE ROOOOOOOOOOOOM~~~~ AND WE ARE GOING TO
TORTURE YOU~~~~

Purist thinks:(Blah blah blah)

Anubarak:AND DONT THINK IM TALKING RUBBISH!!!!

Purist thinks: (He can read minds?)

Anubarak: No,but im paranoid.

Prist:=.=

Anubarak: Nevermind, get on with the torture,GUARDS,BRING IN THE TORTURE MACHINE.

Two Ghouls push in something that looks like a table with two arms on its side.

Anubarak: Activate it and tie our guest here onto the table.

One of the Ghouls pushed a button then both of them grabbed Purist Thunderfart...Sorry ,my mistake. Thunderwrath and tied him on the machine.

Machine:(Took out something like a feather and ..............
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Anubarak: GET ON WITH THE STORY!!!

nginferno: okay okay, just trying to add some effect.

Machine:(Took out something like a feather and tickled Purist's foot.)

Purist: HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!

Anubarak: WTF??WHAT KIND OF TORTURE MACHINE IS THIS??

Ghouls: Sorry, the torture machine we ordered didin't come.So we just used this.

Anubarak: YOU IDIOTS, GET THAT PIECE OF S**T OUT OF HERE AND YOUR FIRED.

Meanwhile,Purist fainted for laughing too long.

Chapter 3 Mission Briefing (and a bad case of english)


In the Sentinel base.

Furion: Magina, where are you ?come here, Im going to gave you and some of our fellow corades a misson .

Magina:(tearing his gaze from chen who is having a bath)
yes, why do you call me here,father ? You should say give istead of gave and is it not corades it is comrades and you even spelled the word mission wrongly.

Furion:Yeah whatever, at least i didnt fail in my ennglish
exam like you did.

Magina: Father, I never gave an exam and english spells like this, E-N-G-L-I-S-H.

Furion: STFU AND DONT ARGU WITH ME BOY!

Magina: Sorry,father. Btw,what are the details of my mission?

Furion: First rally Lina,Rylai,Sven,Yunero and Azwraith.I shall xplain when all of them are here.

Magina: Okay.(Runs off to find his comrades)

Furion:(shakes head)I realy nid to get some tuision.
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Posted on Wed May 20, 2009 7:38 am




Haha, this is some pretty good stuff man. You've got a nice sense of humor, gj and keep going
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Posted on Thu May 21, 2009 9:22 am



chapter two is great.
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Posted on Wed May 27, 2009 2:25 pm

begining of an epic story? hmm..we'll see..amc you're still the best when it comes to these.
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Posted on Wed May 27, 2009 2:47 pm

nice story..
..keep it up..
..can't wait for the next chapter..

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Posted on Thu May 28, 2009 1:36 am

wooo, new chapter.

[b]Chapter 4:The inn

[In Sven's Backyard]

Sven: Wtfidonthaveabackyard

nginferno:i say you have a backyard so you have a backyard.

Sven: why?

nginferno:because im the supreme creator.(albeit just in this retarded story)

Sven:oooo,supreme creator.

nginferno:=.=,get on with the story,im too lazy to write more about this.

Sven:okay,okay.

[In Sven's Backyard]

hey sven, father is sending us on a mission.

Sven:Whos there, whos talking?

its me Magina.

Sven: yes?

that idiot had forgotten to write my name.

nginferno: sorry.

Magina: so, get on with business.

Sven: what mission did he sent us on?

Magina: dono,he just told us to gather Lina, Rylai, Yunero and Azwraith.

Sven: Ok,lets embark upon a long and arduous journey that will be filled with dangers and perils at every step!

Magina thinks:(Maybe not,i think we are going on a long and ridiculus story that will be filled with retardness at every step)

Sven:lets go find Rylai and Lina at the inn.

at the <three maidens inn>

Magina and Sven walks into an inn with some people, and sits down at a table.

Alleria(waitress) walks over there.

Alleria:what would both of you want?

Sven: i want some barbequed beef and a cup of hot chocolate.

Magina: cant you dont eat everytime we go to an inn for business?

Sven: i cant, because i need to replenish my energy before going on a quest.

Magina: whatever.

Alleria: sorry,but our chef is having a bad mood,so please switch to the <chef's bad mood day menu>

Sven takes the <chef's bad mood day menu> and read it.

<chef's bad mood day menu>
1. ash
2. lump of over cooked food that looks like coal
3. charred meat and blackened cheese

Sven:(=.=")nevermind the food,just bring me the chocolate.

Magina: and call out the chef and the drink maker.

In the kitchen

Lina(chef):Darn, i hated that magical open and close sign,we have to flip it a lot of times .

Rylai(drink maker):Nevermind that Lina, atleast it was free.

Alleria walks in

Alleria: Lina, Rylai, Magina and Sven just came for business

Lina: really?lets go out and hope that i can fry some ghouls to release my anger.

Rylai thinks:(i hope she doesnt burn her allies half to death like last time)

Lina and Rylai walks out

at the door ro the kitchen

Lina: wow, that guy is cool,with all the fire on him.

Rylai: who?

Lina points at someone

Rylai: the orge magi?

Lina:=.=, of course not ,that guy.(points at nginferno that is siting beside orge magi)

Rylai:Why is the author in this story?

nginferno: Sorry, not enough money to hire another actor that is handsome and on fire.

Rylai:=.=

Lina: lets get to business

Lina walks over to nginferno and said: can you be my boyfriend? your so cool.

nginferno: nope, sorry ,i got work to do.

Rylai knocks Lina on the head and she fainted and dragged her to Magina and Sven.

Rylai: So,why are you here?

Magina: father is sending us on a mission.

Rylai: So, whats the mission?

Magina, we still dono yet, but we'll have to gather Azwraith and yunero first.

Rylai: lets go then.

Rylai calls everyone to go out and closed the inn While Alleria is getting her self frustrated by flipping the magical close and open sign that says:closing soon, almost closed,near closing, moments till closing etc.

Lina wakes up and chases me and beg me to be her boyfriend around the sentinel base.

Magina: lets go find Yunero and Azwraith.

nginferno: a lil help over here, im being chased by a woman that throws fireballs at me.

Sven: where is my cup of hot chocolate?
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Posted on Thu May 28, 2009 1:51 am

Lol nice chapter!!!!
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Posted on Wed Jun 10, 2009 2:35 am

Chapter 5: More Narutards

As Magina, Sven and Rylai went looking for Yunero and Azwraith, Lina is still chasing me around the sentinels base.

ngiferno: Would you cut that out? You’ve been chasing me for like,2 weeks. GET THE HELL BACK TO THE STORY.

Lina: okay, okay, but your so handsome, with the fire and everything.

nginferno: GET BACK IN THE STORY OR YOUR FIRED.

Lina scrambles back to find the others

nginferno:*sigh*Why does retarded dota stories always have dota heroes that act like retards?

reader: YOU STUPID AUTHOR, RETARDED DOTA HEROES ARE NEEDED IN RETARDED DOTA STORIES BECAUSE THEY ARE RETARDED.

nginferno: lol.

Meanwhile, Magina and the others are just looking for Azwraith and Yunero.

Magina: where the **** are they? we were looking for them for two weeks

Sven: Well, that author was lazy for two weeks so we need to look for Yunero and Azwraith for two weeks T.T.

Suddenly a very big arrow popped out from nowhere and pointed at the direction Azwraith and Yunero are.

Rylai: What is that?

nginferno: A hint for you all.

Magina: you think this is a stupid game show or something?

nginferno: No, I think this is a retarded dota story.

Magina: =.=, whatever.

So , Magina, Sven, Rylai and Lina charged towards the arrow was pointing and rammed straight into a wall and fainted.

nginferno: oops, I forgot to tell them to open the door.

After a few hours……

Magina: (wakes up and opens the door) lets just get in there.

All: ok.

And they all went inside.

Just as they went inside.

Yunero: SHARINGAN!

Azwraith: KAGEBUNSHIN NO JUTSU!

Sven: Hell, Yunero is acting like that Sasuke Uchiha again and Azwraith is also acting like an idiot.

*shine*A time portal opens and Otto, Tuddrussel and Larry of the time squad came out.

Lina: wtf is a time portal?

Magina: whatever.

Otto: I’ve come from the darkness.

Larry: Otto, stop acting like dota heroes and start working.

Otto: I was just trying to get some attention.

Magina(to Sven): I think he did.

Tuddrussel: ok lets just defeat these guys and change Yunero and Azwarith’s memory so they don’t act like naruto characters again.

Larry: okay.

Sven: ARE YOU SAYING YOU CAN DEFEAT ME? THE MIGHTY ROUGE KNIGHT?

Otto knocked Sven out with a stick he found

Otto: one down, three to go.

Larry: good thing we wore this anti-dota hero armor, it is very effective.

And they continued to defeat Magina ,Lina and Rylai.

Yurnero: THATS IT!!I AM GOING TO WIPE YOU ALL OUT!

Otto: try if you can.

Tuddrussel: err, Otto, this armor is weak against narutards.

Otto: why didn’t you tell us before we came?

Tuddrussel: I was busy preparing the time portal.

Otto: Sh*t.

Yunero: RAIKIRI!!

Azwraith: RASENGAN!!

And the both of them killed the time squad.

Sven: Ok, Magina, Lina, Yunero, Azwraith, Rylai, lets just go and find Furion and ask him what our mission is.

Azwraith: My name is not Azwraith, my name is Naruto Uzumaki!

Yunero: As I have already said before, I am not Yurnero, my name is Sasuke Uchiha!

Suddenly 2 meteors dropped from the sky and knocked Azwraith and Yunero on the head.

Yunero: Where am I? I thought I was killed by a meteor.

Some voice from nowhere: No, you just fainted.

Yunero: who are you?

Some voice from nowhere: Some voice from nowhere.

Azwraith: =.=

Yunero : ok, lets go find Furion.
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