The B factor

The B factor

Posted on Fri May 22, 2009 9:29 am

Balanar discovers love and changes his form to approach a human. His diary:


2 April

I have seen the whole world and i have only found pain and uglyness. But i have finally found HER. All these years of hunting and stalking.. nothing matters in the end. Just her. The other half of my sinful soul. Opposites attract..


4 April

This is obscure. I aproached her. What i discover scares me. So pure for a human. And i am a sinner. The difference is killing me. I dont think i will endure this one. From the day i was born i feared nothing, but this.. This is different.


7 April

I have now understood that this is about.. love. A human feeling. How could this happen to someone like me?


13 April

I am reborn. And i am changing in a way i would never i magine. She has suffered before, she told me. And i feel SORRY about her. Such a strange feeling. I have killed thousands and i only feel sorry abou her suffering. I am the same race with her torturer. But she has not seen the real me yet. I could never appear to a human with my real form..


19 April

Nothing is more important than HER now. Nothing more important.. to stalk and taste the BLOOD the blood must taste it the blood must HUNT


20 April

My nature comes between us. I am losing controll of myself, my insticts come forth.. It is hunting season.. have to stay away from her for her own good. Time to fade away. Continoue my sins somewhere else. I only hope i can make it to the other side without her..


23 April

I need to farewell her before i dissappear. The need is similar with the need of blood. I MUST say farewell, no other way to forgeting..


25 April

It was all a mistake, shouldnt see her again. Now my true nature is revealed, i could not help it.. The same as her torturer. She screamed like i was tearing her insides apart.. But i would never hurt her never hurt never..


28 April

FILTHY humans! They can not beat me with TORCHES and SWORDS now they are DEAD in the ground, I SAW their life fading away and tasted their BLOOD stupid they were.. And first of all them, HER the traitor, tortured for good now, SHE asked for this, now shes just DEAD MEAT like the others.. how did she think i would let her LIVE after what she did..


1 May

What have i done? NO NO NO.. what am i? NO It cant be true, its not. Shes gone, i didnt mean to.. NOT hurt her i loved her, shes gone..


5 May

The tears of all my victims over the ages came to haunt me. I, Balanar, cried for the first time and last.


10 May

The world is just meaningless again. I cant escape destiny. I am CREATED to hunt and kill.. The only solution is to stop existing. I need to die and thus i will do. Because the monster in the end of the book is ME and only ME.

THE END
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Posted on Fri May 22, 2009 9:36 am

does this have any point lol o.O

funny

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Posted on Fri May 22, 2009 9:52 am

Balanar's diary read by Dimpapa.

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Posted on Fri May 22, 2009 10:47 am

@dim
nice
@others
although it hasn't got a point, its a nice idea, after all, good stories comes in different sizes
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Posted on Fri May 22, 2009 10:50 am

nice!
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Posted on Fri May 22, 2009 10:51 am

nice story
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Posted on Fri May 22, 2009 11:01 am

Kinda predictable aint it?

Or were you just practicing the execution part of writing a story?
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Posted on Fri May 22, 2009 11:13 am

Well well, someone had just read/watched Twilight.

Ehe, I like the line at the end. The monster at the end of the book.

Oh wait, you DID read twilight just now didn't you!

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Posted on Fri May 22, 2009 11:19 am

Twilight is kinda different. Twilight is nice but it has the feeling of a teenage fantasy. Perfect girl heroine with perfect boy hero type thing.

Even the ending sucked, no closure.

At least this story has some closure.
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Posted on Fri May 22, 2009 12:58 pm

Glad you like it. I havent read Twilight, just saw the movie. My story isnt influenced by Twilight.
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Posted on Fri May 22, 2009 1:09 pm

lol Balanar wil hunt n kill u for dis

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Posted on Sun Aug 30, 2009 6:26 pm

DAMN!
stalker you are!
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Posted on Sun Aug 30, 2009 6:39 pm

Nice. Kinda of an internal struggle of his - like he has two personalities. Sad that he killed her in the end, but I like the ending. If it was a happy end, I wouldn't like it, since it wouldn't suit the storry. Good job!
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Posted on Wed Sep 02, 2009 4:46 pm

I guess you didn't wrote her name for one of the following reasons:

1.You didn't know who would he fall in love with (lol)
2.You wanted to make it mysterious
3.You forgot...lol

Nice
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Posted on Sat Sep 05, 2009 11:27 am

Thanks for reading this crap and commenting (especially anthdx..). The thing is that i got nice ideas but i can't really write them down, if i had some writting skills, this would be better.

@Guns: yea, a happy ending wouldn't fit the whole thing. I'm sad he killed her, too

@Felix: I believe that if i wrote the girl's name i would give the girl a main role and i wanted B. to be in centre of attention.
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