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Posted on Wed Jun 17, 2009 10:36 am

The title is lame, I know, but what can I do.Well, here goes nothing.Take time to read.

STORY OF THE DRAGON KNIGHT

Chapter 1: The beginning

When The Burning Legion fell in Kalimdor, demons scattered all across the planet. The Scourge has been taken back to Ner’zhul, the Lich King, from the hands of three Dreadlords. They were killed afterwards by the Sylvanass Windrunner. From that day, everyone failed to destroy The Scourge. Even Kil’jaeden’s servant, Illidan, with his group of Naga, under command of Lady Washj and Blood Elves, led by Prince Kael’thas, couldn’t defeat the Frozen Throne.
But one of the Dreadlords, named Balanar, came towards The Scourge, in attempt to join them. He knew it was a long shot that they will accept one of their Master’s jailers, but he tried anyways. He got to the Lich, named Kel’thuzad. He wasn’t alone. Around him were 3 necromancers and lots of ghouls. He approached carefully.
“Who goes there”-said the Lich. ”Dreadlord! Destroy him!”
Ghouls charged at the Dreadlord. He smiled at them. Being a Night Stalker, it was most dangerous to engage him while night. Unfortunately for Lich’s forces, the sundown was 3 minutes ago. Although it wasn’t completely dark, Balanar’s powers turned on, heightening his senses, his speed and his skill. The first two ghouls tried to hit him, but he evaded the strikes, sinking his claws into one of the poor ghouls. That was followed by couple of more stabs, after which the ghoul died. The second one tried to run back, but he caught him by his neck, while he stabbed the ghoul to death. That sight made all other ghouls step back, while he walked towards the Lich.
“You are the pet of the Lich King, Ner’zhul, are you not?”
“Yes, I am. Who wants to know?” Kel’thuzad said, trying to think of a reason of him hesitating to attack.
“I am the great Night Stalker, the fear of anything living, going alone into the night. I came towards you, to ask for something.” Dreadlord replied, with great pride.
“And what may that be?” Curiously asks Kel’thuzad.
“I came here to join The Scourge. My fellows Dreadlords might be stupid enough not to join, but I’m not.”
Lich was silent for a moment then said “Come in the forests near the Cease Village. I will come with the news of my master, while you wait there.” The Lich and his party entered the newly conjured portal. Balanar hoped he didn’t make a big mistake that will cost him his life.

Along the path he was reconsidering his words. Did he make a mistake by doing this? Will The Scourge try to kill him? His thoughts were interrupted by a sound of incoming humans. A prey, he thought. He hid behind a tree and waited for them to pass. But what they were talking was much more interesting then killing them. A male voice was heard at first, then the female.
“So, what do you think will happen to that mage?”
“Most likely they will execute him. Who ever heard of combining a human child and dragon?”
“He just gave the boy dragon powers. I don’t think they should execute him for that.”
“Are you out of your mind? Humans are superior over dragons, they should not mix together. People even thinking about it should be executed!”-the male shouted
A third voice came in.
“But what ever kid that was it sure will be powerful now.”-another female voice
“Ha, yea right.”
“Who knows where he hid that baby. I just hope they find it and bring it to a safe home.”
“Most likely they will send it to put it in the cell in Dalaran. It should be executed too. Humans can kill anything, and mixing their power with some other is unthinkable.”
It was full moon. Its glow reminded Balanar that it was night, and he didn’t killed any humans in a long time.
“Then how about you kill me?”-He jumped amongst them. They started screaming, yelling and running away. But none can outrun the Night Stalker in his element...the darkness. He first attacked the male, killing him in one blow. Females separated, to make it harder for him to kill them both. He ran to one, and instantly killed her. He turned around, spotting the second female trying to get away. And she almost has. She ran between two trees. She passed, but Balanar got stuck. In last attempt to kill her, he struck her with a powerful void that almost killed her. In addition, she was barely moving. Meanwhile, he got out of that entangle, and finished her off. Blood was all over the place. Thinking about how humans will try and search for the person responsible for this, he ate them only half way, so that it appears as if an animal killed them. After all, hunter needs stealth to hunt. His thoughts of conversation half an hour ago returned what if The Scourge is on their way to attack him now. He feasted carefully, watching his back for enemies.

Kel’thuzad opened a portal to the Northrends. He was going to his Master, the Lich King, to report to him the status of their invasion into the human kingdom. The Throne was all the way up, on top of the iceberg. The climb wasn’t hard for the Lich, as he is floating in the air, lifted by his arcane magic. Finally he came to the Throne, but he was interrupted by his Master’s deep voice.
“Kel’thuzad, come here at once!”
“Yes my lord.” He said nervously.
“You are late. End you came with less soldiers. What happened in the human lands?” Ner’zhul shouted.
“Well, my lord, we bumped into this Dreadlord, who claimed to be some sort of Night Hunter...” He was interrupted by his master’s voice.
“You mean, the Night Stalker. How come he didn’t slaughter you all? He certainly has the power to do so.” Ner’zhul wondered
“I am getting to that, my lord. He came and killed two of our ghouls and came to me, asking to join The Scourge.”
“He can be a powerful ally. Why haven’t you recruited him at once?” The Lich King said, wondering of his minion’s shear stupidity.
“Well, I wasn’t sure he was so powerful. But I have another proposal.”
“Speak!”
“Let’s see his powers, as he trashes a whole village by himself.” Lich said with great confidence.
“What will happen if some of the humans escape from his attack? Then they will be harder to locate.”
“I haven’t forgotten about that, my master. If some of them escape, they will stumble upon our forces, which will make a circle around the village, so they cannot escape.”
“Hm...For once you did well. I expect that no humans escape. If any one of them escapes, I will blame you directly, not him.”

Balanar was still wondering in the forests. With nothing to do but keep an eye out for trouble, he stopped and rested under a tree. Thought came again, but about something else. Was that story true, has the human boy gotten powers of a dragon? He was thinking can he pose a treat to him? He always had some thoughts while resting alone, if nobody was there to distract him, and even if there was someone, he could still have them. His concentration was astonishing, ignoring everything he didn’t want to see, hear, or smell. His senses were perfectly made for hunting down his prey at night. He could see everything around him, trough trees, rocks, buildings...he could hear anyone from a really long distance, far away from his site, and he could smell them even further away. But right now his senses are occupied by something else...Or someone else. Someone was being chased by an angry mob. It seemed like there were hundreds of them in there, chasing this poor guy. He moved closer. But he sensed something else...Something he didn’t knew he can do. He sensed the guy’s thoughts. “I got to get out of here, for the sake of this worlds destiny, they must not find out about him, or the war is already over.” He couldn’t realize what his exact thoughts were, what was he aiming for. He ran out and grabbed him. Again he heard his thoughts. “No! He must not find out about the boy.” Balanar broke the silence.
“What boy. Speak, wizard!”
The mob came out of the forest. Screams were heard, saying “There he is.”; “Get him.”; “Don’t let him escape.” The wizards final words were “Kill me. Kill me now, before it’s too late.” Shortly after that an arrow flew across the air and struck the wizard in his hearth, killing him instantly. Then the mob turned to Balanar to kill him. They all charged, but he held his position. Right then, chunks of meat started flying around, decimating the crowd. The Lich came towards and blasted the crowd with ice. One was hit by a frost nova, turning him into solid ice, and devastating others that were unlucky enough to be near him. Then ghouls came in, together with the necromancers. Whole crowd was killed in matter of minutes. The meat wagons came in and took the corpses, to transfer them to Northrend. The Dreadlord approached the Lich.
“What were your master’s words?”
“You will be accepted, but only if you pass this test.”
Dreadlord gave him a puzzled look, and said “What test?”
“You are to kill every human in the Cease Village. That shouldn’t be a problem, since we already killed one third of their population, mostly here, but some were killed trying to get out of a circle.”
“What circle? And do I have to kill them alone or...” Dreadlord’s confused sentences were interrupted by Lich
“You are to kill as much as possible. The ones that escape your clutches will meet my ghoul’s. The circle is formed around the village so that no one escapes.” Lich explained to him.
“So, all I got to do is kill some of them? And I get to join.”
“Not really. You must kill the guards, so that they don’t kill the ghouls in the circle. Be aware, though. If you break your stealth, every guard in the town will charge towards you. And there is lots of them, so be careful. After you kill the guards, just make some noise, so they run towards our ghouls. From there on, there is no escape.” Balanar nodded his head, going towards the village.

Whole village was sleeping. Guards were patrolling around, trying not to fall asleep. Some were on horse, while others were just walking. The mounted ones, for Balanar, seemed to be a bigger problem. He carefully approached first guard. He accidentally stepped on a branch, which made the footman turn around. Luckily for Balanar, he has quick reflexes, so he succeeded to hide behind a house, before guard laid eyes on him. Then he rushed to him, putting his hand over his mouth, so he doesn’t make a sound. Balanars claws penetrated his body, and blood gushed as he pulled out his insides. Next second, he was dead. He hid the body in the garden near a house, so that other patrolling units or villagers don’t spot him. Some more came nearby. This one looked more difficult, but not to Balanar. He grabbed the one behind, and silently killed him. The other one turned around to find where did his friend went, but was face to face with the Night Stalker. Before he could let out a sound, he was dead. He also disposed of the bodies quickly and moved to the other ones. In the same fashion he killed them one by one. If Kel’thuzad’s information was correct, there was just one party of guard left. There were 2 mounted warriors there, along with 4 footmen. He needed to be quiet and patient on this one. First opportunity he saw was when one of the footmen halted to rest for a bit. The others went ahead. As soon as they were out of site, he charged the guard, ripping his heart out. He continued following others. And he saw 2nd opportunity coming. They all stopped at the bar, horseman climbing down, since they can’t enter on a horse. He rushed in, getting one more idea. They all had to hand their weapons to the waiter. They started drinking some ale, talking about how they can’t wait for their shift to be over. He jumped in as soon as they drank their bottles, which didn’t take a while. The drunk disarmed warriors are no match for a skilled Stalker like him. He was just tossing them around, to make as much noise as possible, so that villagers start to flee. They were all dead drunk and beaten up. Only the waiter tried to defend them by taking their weapons. Balanar was amused by the show the poor waiter made for him. But he had no time to waste. He took the weapon right out of the waiter’s weak grip and slashed it trough his chest, after which he slaughtered the guardians, feeding on them while they were alive. To their horror, there was nothing they could do, as he broke their legs, so they can’t escape. He checked if there was any guardian with the escaping villagers. Seeing that there are none, he happily returned to his feast, as the disorganized villagers ran in all directions, just to be slaughtered by the ghouls in the circle.


After the slaughter was finished, Kel’thuzad came to the village to congratulate Balanar, and accept him into The Scourge. He was walking down the streets, in which meat wagons were either collecting corpses or destroying buildings. Necromancers came to summon skeletal warriors from the corpses of the guardians. The process was intriguing. First the one had to die, and then the necromancer needed to cast some spell to split the soul of the one into two, which were then brought in the skeletons created by another spell that was casted in the same time. One soul went into one skeleton, while the other in other one. Then by a third spell, they gained a shield and a sword, to fight against the forces of living, to bring them into the same torment in which they are now. But unfortunately, the skeleton warriors don’t last forever. Instead they die in the end, and their soul perishes forever, as the skeleton does. That’s what happens when you oppose the Undead Scourge. Only the best warriors get to live forever as The Scourge, an even worse punishment. Lich got to Balanar, at last.
“You’ve done well. All of the guards died, and none of the ghouls got killed. It seems that no villager has escaped, but we don’t know for sure.”
“Seems that your plan worked. Nice job.”
“Yes, well... (He can’t blush, but instead ice get’s removed from his cheeks. That’s some for of blushing, right?) Thanks to your help, you got accepted in. Congratulations.”
“I need to speak with Ner’zhul about something I heard.”
Lich created a portal and said “Step in.” after which they both stepped in. They got to the top of the Frozen Throne.
“Leave us alone.” Commanded The Lich King, which he obeyed
“Ah, you must be the Night Stalker everyone is talking about.
“Yes, I am the one. I come to you to tell you what I heard and experienced before the test.”
“Speak.”
“First I heard these villagers talk about some wizard who mated a dragon with a human. Then I saw that wizard and... I heard his thoughts. He said that we must not find about someone, or the war is already lost. When I grabbed him he said that I must not find him. I don’t know on who and what was he aiming for...”
“I was planning a war in Kalimdor.” Ner’zhul interrupted him “There I wanted to destroy The World tree forever, and claim this world as our own”
“What are you suggesting, my lord?”
“We need to find this...creature...before Sentinel find it. It could prove to be another useful ally.”

In Kalimdor...
Furion and Tyrande were having a picnic near a waterfall. They brought Mirana with them, their baby. They were eating and talking about the demons that still lurk in Ashenvale and how to dispose of them best and quickly. While they were talking, Mirana crawled away into a cave. Furion and Tyrande knew something was wrong. “Mirana is missing!” were Tyrande’s words. They went of looking for her, only to find her in a cave playing with a human boy. They were both confused, and gave each other a puzzled look.
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Posted on Fri Jun 19, 2009 11:41 am

I dig the story and it is well broken up, but i think u could maybe put more gore into Balanar's executions! Like instead of saying "Balanar stabbed him to death", get creative and make it something like "Balanar lifted him by the neck, and embedded his razor sharp talons through his lower jaw. He watched with growing delight as his victim tried to call out a warning to his family, and let out a joyful gasp as he saw a tear drop onto his cheek. He withdrew his talons, and spoke a promise of setting the man free... but instead, as he dropped him, he bent down and slashed the back of the man's feet, maiming him. He wanted him to watch as he moved silently toward his family..."
Lol ok i am twisted.
Like the story.
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Posted on Fri Jun 19, 2009 1:29 pm

Thanks on advice.Well, i'm not that good with descriptions,and not so good with English, so that i don't know a lot of these expressions.

EDIT:
I won't edit this chapter, but will try to make next one better.
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Posted on Fri Jun 19, 2009 2:43 pm

It's all good bro.
Writing fanfic will help your English btw.
So keep going, lets see what happens to the halfbreed child of human and Dragon!
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Posted on Fri Jun 19, 2009 3:21 pm

nice fanfic ^_^
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Posted on Sat Jun 20, 2009 8:14 am

your fanfic is great too..
i wish i have your imaginations..hehe..XD
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Posted on Sat Jun 20, 2009 8:18 am

Nah, my imagination ain't something :P.
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Posted on Sat Jun 20, 2009 11:35 am

Who is the main character? Balanar, Dragon Knight.
Anyway, continue, its good.
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Posted on Sat Jun 20, 2009 6:50 pm

DK, ofc, don't you see my pict and the name, with Bold texting . Ballanar is just one of main enemies, but can't think of more. Got one more that should be introduced in next chapter. Post suggestions on who should be the enemy(i won't say did i accept it, will just put it in silently, so you still be suprised).First day with no comments i thought nobody likes it
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Posted on Sun Jun 21, 2009 3:50 pm

Enemies..
Let's use logic!To blast one single,but powerful person,you need mostly Agility heroes,or any other mid-late gamers
Mortred,Clinkz,Lycanthrope..Lycanthrope maybe is bestas he could pair Balanar(True spelling,no double letters) in speed,and quick-beating..
Or maybe a Bloodseeker..A halfdragon boy..With dragon blood..Bloodseeker can feel him,find him and rape him it better than anybody..
Also,you can add enemies from Sentinel side,too..
Personal feelings are also important,not only wars of fractions.Ursa Warrior may fit,as he may also be in love with Mirana,or something like that..Well,its you fanfic..

I like helping you,so i give tips on allies,too!
Best would be Humans,like CM or Omniknight..
Or those,hated by normal people..Can't think of any now


And now some things i didn't understood..
Balanar met a mage who created DK in Azeroth Continent..Few minutes later,Dk is playing with Mirana in Ashenvale..
WTF?
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Posted on Mon Jun 22, 2009 11:04 am

Mage gave boy to other wizard who tp-ed into Kalimdor.For what happened you will have to wait.

Allies:
CM,Omni(you guessed them right),Lina and Sven (my fave 5 heroes)

Enemies.Well i don't want an imba team, so that there is no chance of beating them .But as hard as possible.One hero from sentinel will be the enemy.

Also, something else about the mage.Mage hasn't created him, he just matted Dragon with a human to create him, giving him dragon powers. Then, because he was pursued by other humans, he gave it to another mage who teleported to Ashenvale.You will find out more in the next chapter, which should be ready in and 2-3 hours .
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Posted on Mon Jun 22, 2009 3:47 pm

Wanted to post new because i needed one more post for 175 XD. Anyway, half way trough the chapter, so forget what i said before(the time to the next one).Also, this chapter might surprise you all on your view of DK.
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Posted on Mon Jun 22, 2009 7:59 pm

Chapter 2: Childhood

“Where did the boy come from? There are no humans here.” Said Tyrande confused.
“I don’t know.” Furion answered.
Tyrande picked up Mirana, but as soon as she did that, Mirana started crying. Couple of seconds later, the boy bursts into tears as well. This made them even more confused. Tyrande started walking away, but Furion stopped her.
“Where are you going?”
“Back home. I need some rest.” Tyrande said, like she forgot the whole thing
“But what about the boy, we can’t just leave him here? He will die if he isn’t taken care of.” Furion was surprised by his wife’s carelessness.
“The boy isn’t our problem. If human left it, human should pick it up. Not us.”
“We have to bring him with us. What if no one else finds him or some beast does. Imagine if that was Mirana, or even you. And besides, we can’t do that to her.”
She looked at Mirana, who was still crying and just looking at the boy, while he did the same thing. That made her change her mind.
“Alright, we will bring him.”
They went to the picnic site, took al the garbage that was thrown, and went home. On their way back, she was cautious, as if she knew someone was following them. She heard something from the forest behind them. A furbolg came out of the bush, charging for the children. Furion stepped into the monsters way, and summoned treants to attack the foul beats. But their wooden claws couldn’t even penetrate the fury skin of the monster. At last he trapped the monster by raising trees around it. Furbolg was confused, as he never saw trees grow this fast. Tyrande looked around, but saw Mirana and the boy playing. “At least some of us enjoy here” she thought. Quickly dispatching couple of arrows, her tiger jumped right next to the enraged creature. Saying some words in the Elven language, stars started to fall from the sky. 2 stars fell and hit the furbolg, one in the head, and one in the back, as he fell when he received the first blow. The second one was lethal, and killed him as soon at it touched him.
“What in world could cause the peaceful furbolgs to attack anyone, let alone us?” Said Furion
”It seems that it already attacked. There is blood on his face, and his fangs are as bloody as the ones of a wolf.” Tyrande said, examining the body. “By the looks of it, it isn’t elven blood, at least not of our kind. It looks...kinda like human blood.”
“Human? What could have human been doing here? And where is it now?” Furion was confused like never before.
“I think that this human is the father of this boy. We best find him and return him to him, if he is still alive.”
“There will be time for that tomorrow. It’s getting dark, and we need to get them home. We can’t continue trough dark with Mirana and the boy.”
“Ok, but first, we need a name for him. It’s getting really annoying to call him boy every time.” Tyrande said after sighing.
“Let’s call him Arc Honist. I think it’s a fitting name.” Furion said like he was waiting for Tyrande to ask that question.
“You waited all this time so that you can name him that. It’s the same name you wanted to name Mirana if she was a boy. The name doesn’t even fit.” Tyrande got angry and started flaming Furion.
“What. Can’t a father name his son?” Furion said laughing.
Tyrande “*facepalm*I give up. Name him as you wish.”
They went on, leaving the body of the furbolg lying there. Tyrande couldn’t help to ask why it attack? Their race was never aggressive. It just didn’t fit for her. But she went on, thinking that it’s because of the Legion’s corruption. For a whole year Furion was searching for this human, hoping not to find him, ‘cause he always wanted a son. But it didn’t seem fair to him to negate someone the experience of having a son. But as much as he searched, he couldn’t find him. Each day Tyrande was disappointed, because she never wanted to take care of a non-Night Elf child. But she didn’t want to make Mirana sad by taking him away. It was a dead end for her, so it seemed that she will have to keep him. After a year of a hard search, they gave up, and simply accepted the fact that Arc will stay with them.

5 years later...

Mirana and Arc grew closer together, becoming like real brother and sister, aside obvious differences. They often asked “why are we different”. Tyrande was covering the fact of Arc not being Night Elf with some made-up fantasy stories, about how he is special, that a great power lies within him, and that he will unlock it one day, and save this world. But nobody, not even her, realized how much truth her words hold. Arc and Mirana were playing almost all the time, until Mirana had to go to her classes in archery. Their favorite game was Archery. The game wasn’t so complicated. The point was to hit the target, which was mounted onto a dear, so it bees a moving target. You don’t need to stand still you can move around target for an easier hit. But the bows and arrows had minimum range and maximum range. From max range its most points, from minimum least. The points are also calculated by precision and penetration. If you hit a dear, you lost. Dears are protected by a magical incantation so that they don’t die. Although Mirana was practicing Archery, Arc also had some victories. But most of the time it was Mirana who was victorious. Mirana sometimes even taught him the basics: Aim and Fire, and some details about those two. Arc was more interested in swordsmanship, but found no teachers in these lands. But Furion got a surprise for him. On a day they found Arc, they usually make some sort of party. Last time they got him a sword and a shield, mostly because he was jealous on Mirana having a crossbow and a bow. This time Furion got something special for him. As most fathers, he loved his son, and didn’t liked to see him downed. He was always sad when he remembered that there isn’t any Night Elf that can teach him how to use his sword.
“How are you, son?”
“Fine, I guess.” Arc said, depressed.
“What is wrong?”
“Just bad day, that’s all.”
“Would you feel better if I told you something?”
“What?” He became curious
“Well, since you would like to learn how to use the sword and shield we got you, I thought that I find someone who can give you some lessons in swordsmanship.”
“But there are no swordsmen in these lands.”
“Who said I looked here. I went to a friend on Theremore Isle, and she said she could find someone who can show you that.”
He got happy instantly, and started jumping all around, saying “Yey, yey, yey, yey.” Furion was also happy, but got confused by what he saw next. It looked so similar. Only by the age of 7-8 Night Elves get their characteristic long ears. He thought he saw him having those long ears. He rubbed his eyes, but he still saw them. He called Tyrande quickly, and she came worried.
“What is it?”
“Is it just me or does he have long spiky ears, like an elf?” He asked, confused, not knowing what is happening. He wasn’t sensing any magic properties in him when they found him. Or did he gain the magic just now? He couldn’t sense any of it. How come he is becoming more and more like an elven?
“Yes” She said quietly, then louder “Yes he does.” She was also confused. They couldn’t sense any magic in him, but every elf had it. While they were discussing about their actions, Arc went outside. He saw Mirana, who was aiming at a target. He stepped between her and the target, who knows why, while she fired the arrow. Luckily for him, Mirana saw him in time and deflected the shot away, but not far enough so that it doesn’t hit. It hit him in the shoulder. Shortly after, he started to bleed. Furion saw this, and ran outside. Tyrande came close behind, and was startled by what she saw.
“Mirana, why have you shot him?”
“It isn’t my fault. He jumped in front of the arrow. I tried to miss him, but I couldn’t.” She was crying, not wanting her brother to die. Furion pulled out the arrow, and sensed some magic at work. For the first time he sensed magic in the boy. He quickly looked at the wound. It was gone. And when he saw the arrow, it seemed as it didn’t penetrated more than 1 inch. Even for a badly made bow like that, it should have penetrated more. Again, Tyrande and Furion just gave each other a puzzled look.

A year later...

“I need to go. You stay here and take care of the kids.” Tyrande said while putting on her armor.
“What is it now?” Furion asked
“They spotted a powerful creature that they can’t defeat. They got him cornered and are waiting for me so we can finish him of. Mortred is also with us, as well as Shendelzare.”
“Be back soon, and watch out.” Furion said, after what she kissed him and went to the battle.
On the battle scene...Sentinel’s Archers and Moon Riders came to the site (No Luna yet, sorry ). There were also Dryads, represented by Aiushtha.
“Glad to see you, Tyrande. The enemy is inside the cave. Mortred and Shendelzare are waiting for you there.” She said
“Any tips on defeating him. I have two children waiting at home, so I really wanna kill this one quickly.”
“You sure it was a good idea to let Furion alone?”
“No worries, Arc and Mirana will keep an eye out on him.”
They both laughed a bit, after which Mirana went to the entrance.
“Hi, haven’t seen you in a while. What happened?” Mortred said.
“I was busy with the kids. Let’s just get this over with, I need to go home soon.”
“You left Furion alone at home?” Mortred asked
“No, Arc and Mirana are watching him” Again, all laughed.
They entered the cave. It was unusually light in it, but still too dark to see. Mortred separated, and couldn’t find them in the dark cave, because they entered too deep. She started to turn back, but something stopped her dead in track. She tried to move again, but was slower. Then she felt something striking her from the back. She turned around, and saw something black attacking her. Thanks to her slight blur, she could evade some of the attacks, but not all. One got its way to her head, damaging her heavily. She let lose a cry, on which Shendelzare and Tyrande came instantly. First Tyrande’s tiger jumped in front of the monstrosity, which became its ghoulish self again. Shende used a blue projectile, that she called Magic Missile and threw it at the ghoul. It hit the monster and stunned it. Tyrande said some words again in elvish language and two stars hit him as well. Mortred got a grip of herself, and blinked next to the ghoul and cut him with her blade. It turned around and tried to attack her, but got sent in the far corner of the cave, while Shende got back with them. Tyrande fired an arrow onto the ghoul, who charged it, but got stunned by the hit. After that, she dispatched another set of normal arrows, while Shende let lose of a wicked cry, which echoed around the cave. Mortred threw a dagger at him, and then blinked next to him. All that, and monster was still alive. It got out of stun, and went dark again, after which he unleashed a flurry of hits on her. She evaded some, but couldn’t evade the death blow. He distracted her by trying to hit her head, which she blocked. But then she stopped. Her stomach was split open. She was crying out for Shende, saying “Swap with me. Hurry, before I die...” But she never did. The ghoul ate some of her flesh, killing her and regenerating a bit. So occupied by the meal, he didn’t notice other arrow sent out before he gave killing blow. It was Tyrande’s last attempt to save Mortred. “NO...” were her words. Monster got stunned, after which Shende send out a Magic Missile. That combo killed it.
“Why haven’t you swapped with Mortred?” Tyrande asked, on what she got an answer on spiritual language
“*Translated* I can’t swap that much. I haven’t brought my Arghanim’s Scepter. I’m sorry. She was my sister. I didn’t think that the monster will be that powerful.”
She was feeling down. “I could have sent that arrow earlier, or maybe casted Startfall before.” She thought. Then she started to blame Shendelzare for her death. “She should have at least stunned that thing. Or maybe she couldn’t have.” Her thoughts continued in that fashion. She sensed some great magic from the corpse of the monster. She approached carefully, in case it is still alive. He was wearing an amulet of some sort. She took it from him, and continued like nothing happened.

Edited and fixed some mistakes .
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Posted on Tue Jun 23, 2009 1:10 pm

your title is a fail

lol, but you got a nice fan-fic there!

i'll give you one tip on how you link your fan-fic on your signature

try this code

<*a href="url">link message</*a>

<*a href="http://www.dotastrategy.com/forum/ftopic22346.html">Myeverepicfanfic</*a>

Just remove the asterisk. I'm just showing you on how to do it.

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Posted on Tue Jun 23, 2009 1:13 pm

How do I actually do that XD.Bit noobish from that point. What do you want people, i'm just 13.
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