The Nameless [Writers Block Entry]

Posted on Wed Jul 01, 2009 1:31 am

much better than my fanfic lol
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Posted on Fri Jul 03, 2009 9:12 am

This is truly a great story. I liked it very much especially the way you described the torture part, it's very detailed. I enjoyed every moment while reading this, it's very enlightening and inspiring. No, I'm not sarcastic, I'm serious here. That's how people should fight back! I guess the moral of the story is never hurt beautiful maidens thinking they can't fight back, because they can and they do it with great vengeance.

Thank you TheGunslinger for this magnificent story. I'll be waiting for more.

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Posted on Sat Jul 04, 2009 10:31 am

well.. the other fanfic writer's fanfics make mine look like an ordinary fic.. You're so cool gun
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Posted on Sat Jul 04, 2009 11:08 am

@Gun ^^
Nice one :P i like it very much!! I imagined everything that u writed was so cool and i felt so good when i saw what she done to them after taking all that crap from them nice one.. really :P and really inspiring :P u could write a book :P



she is not a demon, she just defened she couldn't endure all that torturing from her stepmother and sisters and something inside her just snaped... she didn't care for anything just to show them the pain she felt all those years they putt her though it.. u wouldn't take all that shit if it happend to u :P

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Posted on Sat Jul 04, 2009 11:21 am

This is the type of shit profs would call literary. Though there is the something bout the story that bothers me.

Its just that although you established the fact that the heroine had been torutured enough to try to escape and kill. You didn't exactly put enought details describing the thoughts that would make her snap. People don't just become sadistic, even with torture. People have a natural aversion to killing which is only eclipsed by there survival instincts. Problem is she already "survived" so you need to put in a small scenario where she has those murderous and sadistic thoughts.

Though that would make me happier I don't think other people will notice, so don't bother
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Posted on Sat Jul 04, 2009 11:45 am

@Everyone - Thanks for your support guys ^_^ and thanks for reading ^_^

@Silent - Well she is more the type that suffers in silence, those people who always act like everything is allright, despite all the shit hapening to them, until one day they just lose it. She suffered a lot, and always suppresed all her rage and hatred towoards her tormentors, thinking it will all pass eventualy...untill one day, she finaly went psycho and did what she did...but she still managed to retain her cold determination in all of that....she enjoyed seeing the suffering of those who made her suffer, because deep inside, she is kind of a sadist, but it would have never showed if she had a nice life...something like that. I might add that part, but I would need some time to think where should I put it.


And call me crazy(i don't mind) but I didn't understand the meaning of this sentence...lol...


PS: Anyone got a suggestion for a better title? The current one is kinda improvised...
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Posted on Sat Jul 04, 2009 1:53 pm

Sorry gunslinger I was watching kaba modern, super cr3w and other dance groups when I typed that so the hiphop in me overflowed. Lol

What I meant was that this is the type of writing that a teacher would like. You can derive a lot of discussion about its morality, thinking and all of those things.

Its good though. It makes me ponder the question: In 10,20 or 30 years , might you be the next "Bram Stolker?"
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Posted on Sat Jul 04, 2009 1:58 pm

you're using Jocafer style of writing huh ? inspired by songs.. =D
but this is good...
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Posted on Sat Jul 04, 2009 2:06 pm

This is a good fanfic.

Though the story would end up dramatic instead of what the theme said.

A rich to rag story.
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Posted on Mon Jul 06, 2009 2:19 am

I wish I could write my remarks more here but that idea was shot down by the voting to send scores via PM

Anyway just for the song, I give you +2 marks
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Posted on Mon Jul 06, 2009 6:29 pm

That was incredibly disturbing.
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Posted on Mon Jul 06, 2009 6:31 pm

That's all you have to say?
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Posted on Mon Jul 06, 2009 6:37 pm

@keybi - it kinda is a rag to riches story, cause she was the one who was tortured for all those years, and, in the end she tortured them. So, it is a rags to riches story but in a strange, sick, sadistic kinda way.

@varun - thanks XD I will read your remarks after the judging is done anyway. I can already sense what they will be like

@Barfles - yeah, it is...watched too much Higurashi no Na ku Koro ni. Any other thoughts?

@Felix - and have YOU got something other to say? XD
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Posted on Mon Jul 06, 2009 6:48 pm

All I have to say is that you sir are a genius.

But a @#$@ing creepy as hell genius.
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Posted on Mon Jul 06, 2009 6:52 pm



LOL. Thanks(for both statements )
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