The Nameless [Writers Block Entry]

Posted on Mon Jul 13, 2009 5:37 pm

Sarcasm: nothing of that sort. This is just the way i am as a critic (but who am i to criticize your work anyway? I'm a beginner). I've read 13 or more fan fictions here and i liked this one the most.
If you've proofread it 3 times you should have seen a lot of wrongly spelled words (20 or more if my memory serves me right). I tend to be brutal (people say) because i try my best to detach my biases and subjectiveness as a critic (as a lowly high school associate ed). The way you present your details...yes...you can really write. I want to see more creations from you... I'm planning on making one too, but i don't know much about Warcraft story (Nerzhull???) so i'll have my research first.
I hope i helped you.
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Posted on Mon Jul 13, 2009 5:40 pm

Wow. This is intense stuff. You know, Slipknot made a song the exact same name as this "the Nameless" and since Slipknot mostly deals with how they hate some guy and slitting their throats etc. you know...

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Posted on Mon Jul 13, 2009 5:54 pm

@Monica - Ah ok, it just kinda sounded like sarcasm XD but many things sound like sarcasm to me... Well if you could point at the spelling errors, I would be able to fix them...(I am a grammar nazi, but spelling is not my best area...)
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Posted on Mon Jul 13, 2009 6:00 pm

And that's how Pudge the Butcher was born.

In all seriousness, though, great writing, man. Aside from a few minor grammatical errors, it's absolutely fabulous. The whole mood of it caught me a little off guard, but the style of writing complements the theme very well. I never thought I'd enjoy reading a story about a very explicitly described triple-murder - suicide, but now I have. Great job again, man.
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Posted on Mon Jul 13, 2009 6:09 pm

stephen king would be ashamed
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Posted on Mon Jul 13, 2009 6:32 pm

@Everyone: Thanks for reading guys ^_^ if you liked the story, vote for me here - http://www.dotastrategy.com/forum/ftopic23028.html - I need all the votes I can get ^_^
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Posted on Mon Jul 13, 2009 6:54 pm

No, no, no Stephen King wouldn't approve it.
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Posted on Mon Jul 13, 2009 7:30 pm



I understood you. I know he wouldn't aprove of it. It is not his style of writing at all. His horror is more suspense oriented. Spooky you may say. I am not trying to mimic him in any way.


Other than that, what do you think about the story?
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Posted on Mon Jul 13, 2009 7:40 pm

It's really good but honestly, the grammar was kind of a put off for me.. fix stuff like that and it will be an amazing read.. otherwise it's almost painful to read with a lot of grammatical errors.

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Posted on Mon Jul 13, 2009 7:54 pm



No you don't
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Posted on Mon Jul 13, 2009 8:18 pm

Even I wouldn't approve it because it reminds me the corrupted and disturbing part of humanity, one of no compassion for both sides of the story. (It is well written, but you could use your abilities in a better way.)
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Posted on Mon Jul 13, 2009 8:28 pm

@braf - everyones talking about grammar errors but noone ever points them out. Could someone finaly do it?

@Shisehise - ^_^

@Maxxinator - I don't like to write about good things...sometimes its kinda boring. I like to write about the corrupted and disturbing aprt of humanity because most people seem to deny it and act like it isn't there. Its nice reminding them from time to time.
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Posted on Mon Jul 13, 2009 8:41 pm

>:- (

This is too disturbing...unrealistic.
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Posted on Mon Jul 13, 2009 8:59 pm



Hyperbole
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Posted on Mon Jul 13, 2009 9:16 pm



+1
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