Thunder Reborn~Chapter 24:Revelation

Posted: Tue Aug 25, 2009 4:37 am

Nice story overall, but you need to work on your grammar as well as your description on the fighting part. Btw, how can you control which part of the body you want to pump more blood to? it doesn't make sense and it's weird.
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Posted: Wed Aug 26, 2009 11:51 am

Can't wait until the next chapter comes out!!!

I NEED IT NOW!!!

LOLZ!!!
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Posted: Wed Aug 26, 2009 1:24 pm

Ahh im sorry guys but there wont be a chapter this week.I know i promised it to come out yesterday but the exams are tomorrow.My exam only finishes next week.

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Posted: Fri Aug 28, 2009 3:05 am

Well, that kinda sucks dude!

I really love this fanfic...

can i ask when will be the next installation to this story coming out?

thanks in advance... ^_^
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Posted: Fri Aug 28, 2009 6:07 am

Definitely next week,say saturday or sunday.

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Posted: Fri Aug 28, 2009 2:42 pm

lalalalalalala... mirnava is losing her ideas
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Posted: Fri Aug 28, 2009 4:22 pm

Can't w8 dude...

just can't wait...

wish it'll be sooner dude...

hehehe ^_^
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Posted: Sat Aug 29, 2009 2:09 am

Lol Im male...and yea i gotta admit im losing some of my ideas.So cant wait for my exams to be over too.

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Posted: Sun Aug 30, 2009 1:33 pm

ZOMG My classes start in 2 days NOOOO

We need more chapters! I'm gonna be away from here for some time
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Posted: Thu Sep 03, 2009 7:37 am

Chapter 19

As the Lich King's caravan was being pulled back to Northrend,Nevermore noticed something in the snow.He bent down and dug the snow up.

"What is it Nevermore?I have no time to be looting things off the ground."

"I apologize your majesty.You may proceed without me.I would like to take a look at this artifact."

Nevermore stared at the artifact.It had eyes and looked like a demon's face.As he caressed it in his hand,its eyes suddenly shone brightly and felt a sharp pain in his head.Before he knew it,he was falling into unconsciousness.

As Furion's party reached the lands near their home,Magina noticed a faint presence in the trees behind him.Instinctively,he turned around and caught a glimpse of someone's eyes in the trees.

The eyes were filled with evil and a strong desire to kill.Magina jumped towards the trees and saw a figure with wing-like body parts sticking out of its back.Luna and Razor followed behind while the rest of the party were to stay put.

Suddenly,Magina disappeared and reappeared further in front.Razor knew that he could channel his adrenaline into a quick movement and appear as though as if he was teleporting.As he thought of it,he realized that he moved faster than usual,and that his heart was beating very fast.

He thought maybe it was because he too had adrenaline and shrugged it off.They had to focus on the enemy.The enemy was moving slower and slower as the sun shone down on him in an open area in the forest.He stopped moving and turned towards Magina.

Magina immediately realized the hideous and cruel face which was filled with scars from old scores he had with him.The man was a professional stalker,but could hardly conceal his lust for blood.He was Balanar,the night stalker.

Magina drew his blades and in a quick movement,appeared behind the stalker and sliced his wing-like body part.The force which allows anybody to use magic,mana stream inside Balanar's body was ruptured and he lost some of it to the open air.

With the remaining force he had in his body,he muttered some words and before Magina could notice,the shining sun turned into a dark viperous moon.Darkness shone on the forest and Magina knew he was in danger.

The night stalker was in his territory now.He spun around and in a quick movement,sliced Magina's chest with his claws and ran towards him.Balanar held his wrist and his palm aimed his palm at Magina's chest.Before he could move again,Magina sliced at him but his quick reflexes allowed him to anticipate it and he moved back.

As he aimed at Magina's chest once again,he suddenly saw light all around him.In that instant,a pain filled his body and he shone brightly.He knelt on the floor and looked at Razor and Luna whom had just arrived.

"You're not the only one who has an advantage in the moonlight."

"Luna...after I've gotten Magina,I'll take care of you!"

"I'm afraid that won't happen Balanar.Why are you here?Has the Lich King already betrayed us?"

"Hahaha...the Lich King???He is useless now.All we need now is Magina and my master's plans would be complete."

Luna took out a glaive and threw it at Balanar whom jumped over it.Luna knew it wouldn't be easy to hit him and after muttering some words,the glaive shone and in mid-air,turned upwards and then downwards again into Balanar's arm.

The night stalker roared in pain and pulled the glaive off his arm.He looked around him and knew he could not win so easily.He started to concentrate.Magina,Luna and Razor noticed a dark aura emitting from his body and they backed away.

But it was too late.The aura grew stronger and stronger,pressuring all 3 heroes to their knees.They were filled with a certain...fear.The night stalker's face was black now and the aura kept growing.

The aura could easily pressure a human into fainting instantly,and the 3 heroes knew that.Balanar walked towards Magina and lifted his claw.

Furion's party saw the moon and knew that there was danger.They headed towards the direction they had seen Magina going in and drew their weapons.

"Master!You have returned!"

"Lanaya...Where is Balanar and Mercurial...?"

"Balanar is going to capture Magina the controller of mana.Mercurial is..."

"Where is she!?"

"She has ran away.She didn't wish to be part of the legendary being you are to create."

"No matter.I have found the true darkness..."

The shrouded man threw a dark body onto the ground.

Lanaya noticed the aura of the person and was startled

"Nevermore?"

End of Chapter

Finally after a long wait,Chapter 19 is here.Sorry once again to those I had disappointed.

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Posted: Thu Sep 03, 2009 1:00 pm

hmmm... just noticed a spelling error.. artefact should be artifact..
I think you should change this cause some people will flame you for this sole error... anyway..
great wait..
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Posted: Sat Sep 05, 2009 4:58 am

Hmm I see,I've corrected them.
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Posted: Sat Sep 05, 2009 6:27 pm

When will you be posting the next chapter?...

and nice chapter too... ^_^

please make it sooner...

^_^ thx in advance...
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Posted: Sun Sep 06, 2009 10:37 am

NICE STORY! ^^
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Posted: Tue Sep 08, 2009 8:02 am

Wow... Two twists in a row
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