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Cervantes de Leon - Dread Pirate [September BC Entry]

Posted on Tue Sep 22, 2009 7:22 pm

Hello everyone. Yes, it's me again with another Hero Idea. With a special one, cause this one is my first time to Bard Challange. So...It's not an awesome creepy swordsman. It's dreaded, horryfing wielder of swords, hellfires and lightnings! Welcome the Cpt. Cervantes de Leon!

Burn to ashes! Taste my pain! And come with me to Hell! - Cervantes de Leon

Cervantes de Leon – Dread Pirate
Range : 100 | Move Speed : 300
Primary : STR
Str : 24 + 2.4 | Agi : 19 + 1.8 | Int : 18 + 1.6
Damage : 40 - 45 | HP : 503 | Mana : 255
HP Regen : 1.13 | Mana Regen : 0.81
Attack Speed : 1.33 | Armor : 2

Storyline : In hard times of pirates, seafights and corsairs there where one captain, other than the rest. This captain was named Cervantes de Leon and he served the Spanish Crown. His life was as peaceful as a pirate life can be – he had his ship, loyal crew, house on shore and preety little daughter Ivy. And this peacful life was going until his fourty-eights. In this bad (for world) year, Cervantes met an Italian merchant, Valentino Vercci. Vercci was naming himself “Merchant of Death”. He sold our Spaniard a map. Map that was leading to Sword of Heroes, Sword of Salvation...to the Soul Edge, a trap that slowly consume the soul of a user. But Cervantes didn’t know the danger. He sailed, he digged out, he took, he sailed home...And woke up during the voyage on empty ship. Nearly empty – the remainings of his crew were still on the ship. He was named a mass-murdered and burnt in a name of justice...but he cannot be killed from that moment. He was cursed, and he is still cursed by evil blade that disappeared in strange situation. After his “death”, he rose up from his ashes, making his way through Hell. He named himself Captain Cervantes, the demonic, cursed and dead pirate, the only master of Sword of Heroes. He changed greatly – it’s a consecvence of hundreds of devoured souls and journey through Hell. His mind soon became clouded with only one thought – to find Soul Edge, eliminate all that oppose him and show them all who is the best here. And, when this objective will be completed...He will finally reunite with Soul Edge once and for all. During his searching, he even devoured Ancestor Raijin’s essence and obtained his powers (but he could not hold the Ancestor for long). In Azeroth he saw the conflict between Scourge and Sentinel. Cervantes then joined Lich King – souls of heroes fighting on Sentinel’s side will give him power great enough to reunite when he finally find Soul Edge. Know, he stands alone on battlefield, wielding both power of hellfire that sank deep within his corrupted soul and a might of Raijin, Ancestor known as Thunderlord, Warrior with Burnt Face and King of Iron Fist.

Okay, this is remastered version of Cervantes de Leon, Spanish pirate in Soul Calibur game series. In this remastered version, he is one of the most powerful villians in my universe. Hence, it’s his 3rd “version”, made for DotA. This is his normal form, and this is his Soul Edge form.

Hellfire Bullet (H)
Cervantes wields two swords – a long blade Acheron and gun sword Nirvana. With Nirvana’s pistol hilt, Cervantes can shoot his enemies with great accuracy. Moreover, he can imbune the shots with his hellfires, scorching those pawns from afar. Deals initial damage and DoT, stops channeling spells every time DoT is dealt.
Level 1 – deals 75 initial damage and 10 damage every second for 5 seconds.
Level 2 - deals 100 initial damage and 15 damage every second for 5 seconds.
Level 3 - deals 125 initial damage and 20 damage every second for 5 seconds.
Level 4 - deals 150 initial damage and 25 damage every second for 5 seconds.
Mana Cost: 95/105/115/125
Cooldown: 16
Framework : Cervantes aims his target with Nirvana’s pistol, then shoot a small fireball that grows bigger while traveling to the target.
Notes : Target gets initial damage, 0.2 ministun and then damage per second and a 0.2 ministun every second.

Shattering Thunders (S)
Although Raijin is no longer a prisoner of Cervantes’ wicked soul, the powers of an Ancestor are still in pirate’s possesion. Dread Pirate can unleash powerful lightning bolts from his fingerprints in the same manner as an old geezer that he killed many years ago in galaxy far away. Using this spectacular power he shocks his enemies with force great enough to shatter their armors. Last 10 seconds. For this time, Cervantes loses 40 dmg.
Level 1 – each shock deals 25 damage and reduces armor by 0.5.
Level 2 - each shock deals 30 damage and reduces armor by 1.
Level 3 - each shock deals 35 damage and reduces armor by 1.5.
Level 4 - each shock deals 40 damage and reduces armor by 2.
Mana Cost: 180/170/160/150
Cooldown: 45
Framework : Cervantes points his arm at his enemies, unleashing lightning bolst for his fingerprints. He starts to walk instead of running.
Notes : As soon as Cervantes begans to walk, he fires lighning randomly at the 400 AoE in direction his faces. This lightnings shock random points of AoE. Units that will be in 50 AoE of shocked point will suffer from damage and armor reduction. Buff lasts 5 seconds and cumulates with itself and other armor reducing effect (such as Nevermore’s aura). This can really rape armor, but the prize is lowered damage (he can’t fight with Nirvana).

Dread Charge (D)
With humanity Cervantes also lost the barriers of human body. He can travel with great speed without touching the ground, he doesn’t need to breath, he can wring his neck...But what concerns us is his inhuman speed. Cervantes can gathers his powers and charge through his enemies like torpedo, throwing them in air and drowning them in a sea of pain that slows them down. Also, he leaves a schorded earth behind him, adding more salt to their wounds.
Level 1 – every unit touched by Cervantes gets 50 dmg and flies high, then falls down, schorching in flames for 20 damage every seconds for 5 seconds. Lowers MS by 5%.
Level 2 - every unit touched by Cervantes gets 60 dmg and flies high, then falls down, schorching in flames for 25 damage every seconds for 5 seconds. Lowers MS by 10%.
Level 3 - every unit touched by Cervantes gets 70 dmg and flies high, then falls down, schorching in flames for 30 damage every seconds for 5 seconds. Lowers MS by 15%.
Level 4 - every unit touched by Cervantes gets 80 dmg and flies high, then falls down, schorching in flames for 35 damage every seconds for 5 seconds. Lowers MS by 20%.
Mana Cost: 110
Cooldown: 18
Framework : Cervantes leans backwards, raising his leg and becoming aflame. Then he charge like torpedo with great speed, making a perfect circle of fire, tossing touched enemies into air. When he gets back to his position, he is ready to fight again.
Notes : “Channeling” animation last 0.7 second. He makes perfect circle of fire. AoE is 400, which means that highest point of this circle must be at 400 range from Cervantes. AoE of charging Cervantes is 100. This spell is area-targeting and unit-targeting both. Slows last as long as burning.

Soul Edge (E)
Cervantes himself died many years ago, that’s a fact. He lives to this day only with help of Soul Edge’s fragments stored within his body. Power of a cursed sword devoured his soul, but gave him great powers instead. Moreover, he can unleash a portion of Soul Edge’s true power. Using fragments stored within his body, he can transform into his second, even more dreaded form – but to do this, he needs lots of souls. Transformation last 40 seconds.
Level 1 – reduces cooldown of each skill by 3. Gives 10% bonus HP. Increases AS by 10%. Needs 20 souls.
Level 2 - reduces cooldown of each skill by 6. Gives 20% bonus HP. Increases AS by 20%. Needs 30 souls.
Level 3 - reduces cooldown of each skill by 9. Gives 30% bonus HP. Increases AS by 30%. Need 40 souls.
Mana Cost: 160/240/320
Cooldown: 120
Framework : Cervantes blows up with hellfire, changing his form into full Soul Edge’s possesion.
Notes : In this state, Cervantes can uses his skills more often, has more HP and attacks faster. Also, when he gains his ultimate, he recives passive skill “Soul Hunger”.

Soul Hunger (Passive)
Cervantes thirst for souls becomes more and more powerful as time passes by. He needs them to unleash his true potential, to empower Soul Edge’s fragment stored in his body. Each soul also raises his HP and MP regeneration. He gains those souls by simplest of ways - by killing his opponents.
Level 1 – maximum of 25 souls. Each soul gives 0.1 bonus HP and MP regeneration per second.
Level 2 - maximum of 40 souls. Each soul gives 0.2 bonus HP and MP regeneration per second.
Level 3 - maximum of 55 souls. Each soul gives 0.3 bonus HP and MP regeneration per second.
Mana Cost: N/A
Cooldown: N/A
Framework : None.
Notes : Souls from fallen heroes are worthy and counts as 5.

Discussion :
Awesome creepy swordsman...No. You’re dreaded, horryfing wielder of swords, hellfires and lightnings. No one can stop you. They think that their armor will withstand anything? Show them their mistake by shattering their armors with powers of Raijin! They think that their powerful spells will shake the world itself? Shoot their heads of their necks with your trusted sword! They think that they can run away from you? Show them true meaning of despair and burn all in your charge’s way! They think that you gave all you’ve got? Unleash the fury of Soul Edge and take them to Hell! No one can stop you. You are immortal and thay cannot say the same. Your time has come, their time has just ended.

Your best allies? You don’t need any of those pathetic scums...But those than can deal huge amount of damage will help you. Stuners will also help you, cause you don’t have skills to stop your pray. With Nevermore you will rape every armor.

You don’t need to be afraid of channeling spells, but normal nukers can destroy you fast. Permabashers will also poison your blood. Silencers will also work on your nerves.

For items ...Hmm...DO NOT buy Refresher Orb, cause in your changed form you can spamm with your spells. Arcane Ring will fit better. Think about Assault Cuirass to lower their armor even more and increase your AS. Power Treads will be the best boots for you. Think about Satanic for lifesteal.

Props :
- armor raper
- good AS and MS
- spammable skills
- nice stats gain

Cons :
- low damage spells
- no escape mechnism
- true power only with ulti
- no powerful nukes nor powerful attacks
- item dependant

Okay...Hope he gets to top 4 along Circo, Amu Lette and Feodora (my favourites)!

Best regards, Genn.
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Posted on Wed Sep 23, 2009 1:07 am

review!
Most of his skills are dps,huh?
1st,fine... Just thinking the dps is rather low
Btw,nirvana is Yuna (ffx) last weapon,right? I love ff series
2nd, allright, if there's only one foe,you'll target that one only,right? The thunder looks like Raijin attacks or leshrac's thunderstorm?
Armor reduction stacks?augh...
3rd,the requirements,allright,no comment ulti,reduce CD
Dont increase hp by 300, i think percent is better... Cooldown,use x/y instead,rather than 9 sec,that 2nd skill has an awesomely long cd...
Btw,why dont you put some amplify dmg?bcuz he is battlemage
Just my thought
<it's just all my thought> *_*
Hey, i accidentally saw your last words, thanx,but other will be pissed...
GJ overall
Radiance suit him well for dps
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Posted on Wed Sep 23, 2009 2:58 am

wheee... got inspiration from Soul Calibur, eh?
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Posted on Wed Sep 23, 2009 4:09 am

Feodora is disqualified Genn, so you wont be seeing that situation afterall.


About the hero...you may want to buff the first and second skill. As they are now, they aren't really too usefull, especialy the first one(maybe add a slow to it? Or a ministun every time the DPS is dealt?)

Also, how do you get souls?(Killing creeps? Or When they die near you no matter who killed them?) Do the souls required for the third skill disappear when it is used?

The second skill is really underpowered - compare it to battery assault or Diabolic edict, and you will see it for yourself. I suggest a remake, or removing the self-slow.
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Posted on Wed Sep 23, 2009 5:03 am

Genn, hear the pros said... LOL
But his 2nd skill isn't that underpowered,right?
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Posted on Wed Sep 23, 2009 6:17 am

Hey everybody.

Looking on my recent IMBA and OP creations I try to use lower numbers...and it took its vengeance.

1st skill...Nirvana is actally state of absolute inner peace and also a name of Cervantes' gunsword. Maybe I should increase damage to 150 at all levels and add a ministun every second (as TheGunslinger says)? Yap, I think I'll do it.

2nd skill...Have you ever seen Emperor Palpatine (Star Wars) casting his lightnings? Thats the way how Cervantes casts his own. And no, it shock random points even if you're fighting single hero. If it will aim single target, the armor will soon became about -80%...And I compared to the Battery Assault. I remove self slow then.

3rd skill...You think I should increase damage for this spell? Or add a slow effect?

Ultimate...10/20/30% bonus hp will be right? Also, souls are gained by killing creeps (heroes count as 5) and 20/30/40 souls are destroyed as a "food" for a Soul Edge when casting ultimate. And I will leave cooldowns reduction as it is. 2nd skill CD should be like that, because with ex. 20 sec CD and 10 sec duration it would be IMBA armor raper.

And yes...and no. This character is inspired by one of the baddest badass in my universe...but this BB is indeed inspired by cervantes from SC.

Thanks for comments and criticism. Best regards, Genn.
PS
Oh yeah, I got the streak!
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Posted on Sat Sep 26, 2009 10:01 am

*decides to bumps up*
Also, I added MS slow to 3rd skill and raised DoT. Low initial dmg stay as they were. And I raised Mana Cost slightly. Feedback, comments and reviews are welcome.

Best regards, Genn.
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Posted on Sun Sep 27, 2009 8:49 am

Stats - quite large...considering he is a str hero, 22 + 2.1 agi and 19 + 2.0 int is a lot. Compare his stats to other STR heroes, especialy those simmilar to Cervantes in their playstyle and skills, and remaster the stats, as the skills do not justify them.


1st skill - deals a total of 200/225/250/275 damage scaling by levels. That is not good, because it deals waaay too much damage on the early levels. Lower the inital damage on lower levels to fix this - maybe make it like 75/100/125/150 so then it would deal a total of 125/175/225/275 damage scaling by level. That will be ok, since this is primarily a chasing semi-disable skill.


2nd skill - Update the notes. He doesn't slow down anymore.
Overall its a good skill, since I presume the blasts are fired once every second? The cooldown and the reduced damage balance it quite well.


3rd skill - Deals a total of 150/185/220/255 damage, which is quite balanced. The slow is mediocre, but still good enough. I'm not sure if it fufills the requirement of the BC, but Ghost is the judge of that, not me.
Anyway, this skill can synergyse with the second skil lquite well. Just a few questions - can you preform this skill while the second skill is active? If so, will the effects of the second skill continue while you are preforming this skill?


Ultimate - Balanced enough considering the consumption of souls, but make the duration lower, and scaling with level(example 35/40/45) to balance it more(the cooldown reduction makes the first and second skill really dreadfull(since they both last 5 seconds, and it lowers their CD's significantly), then make the CD static on all levels(120). But thats up to you.
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Posted on Sun Sep 27, 2009 9:50 am

I'm glad that you comment. Hope the breakfast was tasty.

About the stats...You're right. I wanted them all high cause Cervantes is both very strong, very fast and agile and wields powerful magic. But it isn't some kinda story but game that need to be ballanced. Does the 19 + 1.8 AGI and 18 + 1.6 INT are good?

1st skill - after a while I too think that the damage is little to big. Zeus's (typical nuker) Lightning Bolt deals 100 dmg on fisr level AND doesn't have Dot AND doesn't ministun. So I'll stick to your numbers and lower the initial damage.

2nd skill - yes, blasts are fired every second. And by "slowing down" I meant that he begans to walk. Although he will move with normal speed, animation will be different. But yes, I will change it to "As soon as Cervantes begans to walk". And of course ther is five random blast, one for each fingertip.

3rd skill - well, you need to pint the location and projectile makes a perfect cirlce...But in this case Cervantes IS a projectile himself...ABout co-operating with 2nd skill - I think that this skill will disable 2nd for a moment (0.7 casting time and anim), which will give Cervantes his damage back. Buff will last on shocked enemies. As 3rd skill last for about 1 second, if you will use it 5 seconds after you activated 2nd, after Dread Charge you will be left with 4 seconds. What I'm trying to say is that skill won't work during charge, but timer will not stop.

Ultimate - hmm...Maybe your right. I will reduce the duration to 40 seconds on each level and make 120 CD. About the CD's reduction - yes, it makes Hellfire Bullet spammable like hell (DoT ends, another shot is fired) and gives as perma ministuner...So, do this numbers are good? And what about Soul Hunger? It also adds bonus MP and HP regen...Doesn't it too high? On 3rd level if you'll reach the maximum of stored souls it gives you 16.5 MP and HP per second...Isn't it IMBA?

So, could you look at it and say something about? Then I will edit. I want to be sure, ya know...

Thanks for comments, advices and criticism. Best regards, Genn.
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Posted on Sun Sep 27, 2009 10:06 am

16.5 regen isnt that imba,you need quite a lot of time for it
Hey, i said just use x/y format for the cd shortage... I think gun also agree...
Btw,review my panda plz?
And plz again,make me da story
Not compulsory,though
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Posted on Sun Sep 27, 2009 10:33 am

The stats would be good as you suggested.

The stored souls regen is not imba, because it takes time to get that much souls.
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Posted on Sun Sep 27, 2009 11:17 am

Okay, changes done. Now I wait for other comments and for Shimrra_3 or Ghost to say me that 3rd skill fufills the theme skill or not...On the other hand, Ghost stated somewhere that they don't comment ideas that are good...Not know what to think, really.

Thanks for comments, advices and criticism. Best regards, Genn.
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Posted on Sun Sep 27, 2009 11:24 am

Maybe they're busy?
My heroes dont have any comments from them,but alot of from other members
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Posted on Fri Oct 23, 2009 12:44 pm

Hey everyone. September BC have just ended and I see a potential in old Cervantes. Look at him and give your vote, please.

Best regards, Genn.
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