A story hope you enjoy it 5 (Life in the city of guilds 1)

A story hope you enjoy it 5 (Life in the city of guilds 1)

Posted: Sun Jun 10, 2007 5:06 am

In Ravnica, there was a man named Edward Zelts. He had everything in life, he was the son of one of Ravnica's elite, he was a kind man that helped the poor, he was humble, he is able to do housework and other heavy tasks, he was handsome, he was a gentle man, he was intelligent, he was talented, he has a good sense of humor, and further more, he was never angry in his entire life. He was the "perfect man" in the minds of the daughters of Ravnica's elite, many had fallen madly inlove with him. Many of the higher class visits his house almost everyday asking to join their business through marriege. But his parents will always answer:

"Marriege should be out of love not wealth" his mother would say.

Edward studies magic privately with an Izzet mage as a teacher. Beacause the Izzet mage saw talent in him, he was summoned to Nivix to give a presentation of his power to Niv-Mizzet, who was very much impressed. Because of that, he was offered a high position in the Izzet guild, he was stationed in Nivix and was even further educaated about science and magic by Niv-Mizzet himself. The Izzet guild was so impressed when Edward developed a new breed of weird(a cross breed elemental) that was capable of giving of a powerful Electric shock that can stun even the largest of wurms and Grozoths for an entire day. He called it "Boltic Weird."

One night, during a celebration at his house, he saw a daughter of an elite. She was beautiful, and in many ways like him, but she was sometimes a "tough girl" and somewhat of an amazon. When gazing upon her, he felt something he never felt before, ignoring it, he went to greet the guests. Everything turned out fine until he got to the girl...

"S-so a g-good evening, uh, p-please e-enjoy t-the f-food."
He said in a tounge tied manner.

"What's up with the tounge tiedness? why don't you eat some yourself?" replied the girl.

"Ok then I shall." he said

He was a bit shaky and spilled some of the food.

"Oh, a real sorry everyone I will personally clean that." said Edward.

He took a mop and started to clean the mess. When he came back to dry the wet floor he slept in it and fell on his back.

"Real sorry for that again"

"Here let me help you" said the girl.

"umm..No it's ok" replied Edward.

"Alright if you insist" added the girl.

Later that evening. Edward went up on the terrace looking at the clear sky and the moon. He was soon joined by the girl...

"So was that your first screw-up?" said the girl.

"Uh, n-no that h-happened to m-me many t-times w-when I w-was a y-young boy." replied Edward

"But as a man, was it? Don't worry I won't spread it." added the girl.

"W-well y-yes." replied Edward.

"What's up with the tounge tied ness? This the first time you ever talked to a girl? Anyways I have to go. Nice talking with you." said the girl.

"Wait, what's your name anyways?" said Edward.

"You want to know? well it's Mezia Frazendare." she replied.

Later that night Edward can't sleep well. He would think of the girl all night long. Until he finally realized that he had fallen inlove with the girl. When he sucked up the truth he started to take leaves from his work in the Izzet guild just to court the girl...

"So, what's up now Edward you've been taking a lot of leaves recently." said Niv-Mizzet.

"Well, I been a bit busy for a while." Edward replied.

"So tell me is she beautiful?" asked Niv-Mizzet.

"How did you know?!" said Edward.

"Oh please, I'm Niv-Mizzet, I know everything. So good luck with that. Oh, and give her some fireworks using some of the weirds." Niv-Mizzet added.

After several months of courtship, he finally proposed to Mezia...

"U-um Mezia, will you marry me"

Then before Mezia could utter a word a loud explosion was heard and there was a message on the sky:

MEZIA, WILL YOU MARRY ME

"Wow what a nice surprise and yes I will but you don't have to do that" replied Mezia.

"But that wasn't mine, it's probably from my guild"

He went home happily, and when he got home he danced with all the guards at his house and spun them away one by one. The next day, he took another leave, and he had dinner with Mezia. When they got to Edward's house a large explosion was suddenly heard and a big inferno of flames destroyed his house and before he could react he saw before him, his family and fiance burned and life less...

To be continued...
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Posted: Tue Jun 12, 2007 11:28 pm

Nice story. Sad, sad ending though. I'd better starting reading your other stories if they are as entertaining as this one.

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Posted: Fri Jun 15, 2007 1:53 pm

Next one's coming, I'm currently typing it.
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Posted: Sat Jun 16, 2007 1:12 pm

nice... but sad... T_T

gonna read the next part...
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Posted: Fri Jul 13, 2007 6:05 am

Nice but sad and please please try to improve your english.
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