Who should be the main character?

No ending time set.
Terrorblade 11% [ 25 ]


Magina 21% [ 46 ]


Banehallow 11% [ 24 ]


Mortred 12% [ 26 ]


Kel' Thuzad 3% [ 8 ]


Rylai 13% [ 29 ]


Purist 4% [ 9 ]


Lina 4% [ 10 ]


Sven 14% [ 30 ]


Anub' Arak 2% [ 6 ]

Posted: Tue Dec 11, 2007 5:42 am

Hmmmm I seem to have written the story really badly last post and i was miscomprehended :S. Terrorblade was supposed to be the leader of the other group that attacked Roshan (Terrorblade faked his own death with the aegis). They were trying to kill the illusionists without witnesses so they had to kill the other people as well. hmmm this is gonna be hard. I'll try concluding the battle though


It was Razor that noticed it first, in a desperate attempt to warn Morphling he shouted, "MORPHLING HE'S ABOUT TO...." he couldn't finish his sentence, a bullet that had been building up pressure in the Sniper's gun barrel fired at Morphling at what seemed like a million miles per hour. Suddenly Morphling disappeared and Bradwarden appeared in Morphling's position. Kardel, Anubarak and Anubseren looked in horror. The bullet buried itself right into Bradwarden's head...
"Oh crap..." said Kardel a tear going down his eye. Bradwarden was one of his keenest and most able students. Suddenly Bradwarden went up in smoke however, the others had already noticed it, Kardel was the only one to realise that Bradwarden had been a replication.
"DIE!" called someone. Kardel turned around to see Bradwarden fighting Morphling. He saw Bradwarden stomp the ground.
"Now's our chance!" shouted Kardel and within seconds Morphling was down.
"So I see that you have defeated my inferiors, but you are still no match for me," mocked Razor picking up his dead friends most valuable items. "You all have no chance against me..."

Mental blank. I was thinking some sort of self sacrifice to defeat Razor.... finish it Razorfane
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Posted: Tue Dec 11, 2007 5:44 am

my stories gone ive been writing it all morning and coz the internet is off suddenly i saved it and its gone sry evry1
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Posted: Tue Dec 11, 2007 10:23 am

finish it guys!!pls!!
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Posted: Tue Dec 11, 2007 12:42 pm

On the other side of the warehouse, Rooftrellen was still struggling with his own illusion. It seemed that it mimiced every single move it did. So Rooftrellen, being the intelligent and experienced treant that he was, suddenly became invisible, and in turn, making his illusion disappear as well.

However, the eye that he put up on the post was still undamaged so he could see where he clone was. He crept up stealthily and speedily, amazing for one as big as him and thrust the blade right into his illusion which finally disappeared in a cloud of smoke.

But he would not be able to celebrate his victory yet however as there was still Razor, the Lightning Revenant who, now taking all of his allies most valuable items, was seemingly unstoppable.

He took The Butterfly from Azwraith, The Manta Style from Slithice, The Heart of Tarrasque from Nessaj, Morphling's Refresher Orb and he brought out his own weapon, the Mjollnir, the legendary weapon that is second only to the Divine Rapier.

And then, he did something unbelievable. He attached the Refresher Orb into the Mjollnir which had an opening in it, created by Razor himself to make it a devastating weapon indeed. And because he was floating, he really had no hands to carry his weapons but all three were floating as if he could use them all along with his infamous shield with which everyone realized was an Aegis of the Immortal.

Everyone looked at this Revenant with awe, that such power really existed in this world.

Razor: Oh yeah, about this shield, I took it from Roshan who was reborn even more powerfully recently but I did it alone.

Everyone thought he was bluffing until he dealt the first strike with a lightning that jumped from post to post of the warehouse, electrocuting anyone who got close.

Centaur and Rooftrellen tried to get in close but as they got near, they saw how they would easily be struck. So they stepped back and let the Nerubians have a go.

At first Anub'seran was running circles around Razor, damaging him quite well until he was struck by lightning which immediately broke his invisiblity. This caused him to step back and start shooting his projectiles at Razor who easily dodged it as he had The Butterfly and excellent speed only to be later have his mana burned by Anub'arak which reduced his capacity at using magical attacks.

As these events followed, Razor saw the sniper arming his rifle with one of those specialized bullets. Razor fired another charge of bouncing lightning and made it hit the sniper rifle that Kardel was holding which made it overload, explode and made the bullet backfire at him, instantly killing him.

Bradwarden: He...he...can't be...dead...can he?

Razor: Don't bother with that old man, no mortal would survive what he just got hit by.

Bradwarden: ...You will pay for what you've done!!!

Bradwarden suddenly got aggressive, to the point that he was already giving Razor a hard time as Rooftrellen too, was swinging at him using his Divine Rapier and Anub'seran was shooting some of his geminated attacks. Anub'arak then jumped up to Razor's level and impaled him down to the ground.

Razor let out a cry and was surrounded by a shield of pure lightning created by the Mjollnir. As he was lying there on the floor stunned, Bradwarden lifted his front legs and stomped Razor like he had never stomped anyone before. Stunning Razor yet again, as he finally collapsed into pieces...

When they remembered that Razor's shield had been an Aegis of the Immortals all along. It shone very brightly, shattered into pieces over the armor. Then the armor in which Razor had been manifested in shone as brightly as the Aegis did and everyone saw that it was once again charged with electricity even more intense than before as they witnessed how the Lightning Revenant was reborn.

This time Razor was infuriated. He looked around, and saw some loose metal lying on the ground. He decided it could still be used as he electrocuted it, and linked these pieces to his armor, which was now thicker and nearly impenetrable.

And then...Razor went mad. He moved and attacked with twice as much speed as before, constantly firing a charge of bouncing lightning while he was being protected by a lightning shield. It was as if Razor was made out of pure power now. He was able to strike first Anub'arak who was not as swift or enduring as the others and he followed up two, then three, four, five, six and he continued this until the strikes of lightning struck Anub'arak down.

Rooftrellen was stealthy and quick but razor was faster. He was able to slash Razor's armor with the Divine Rapier, almost completely shattering it only to see that all the pieces were bonded together by lightning.

Razor: YOU WANT TO FIGHT ME WITH BLADES? SO BE IT! DIE!!!

Razor then, with the levitating blades of The Butterfly and Manta Style, conjured up two illusions of himself as his illusions struck Rooftrellen brutally with both of the blades they were equipped with, causing Rooftrellen to fall as well. Both Bradwarden and Anub'seran could not do anything to help Rooftrellen as Razor would just end up killing them all. It was only then that Razor's Illusions disappeared.

Razor looked at the other Nerubian and shot not the Nerubian, but the eye that Rooftrellen put on the post to put it under his control. Now the Nerubian, having nowhere to run to, just used Shicuchi anyway for even if Razor could see him, he would still be too fast. So decided to run circles around Razor when the lightning shield again, reappeared around the Lightning Revenant.

Anub'seran knew better than to make contact with lightning so he instead stopped and shot razor with his geminated projectiles, actually hitting Razor twice in the process but caused the lightning shield to fire two Static Charges at him as well dealing more damage to him than he did to Razor.

He was shocked and unable to move at the time which Razor took advantage of, firing the chain lightning once more to him, bouncing off and hitting Centaur then back to Anub'seran. Anub'seran then, when it looked like he was going to die, caused a time lapse bringing him back in time when he was still in better condition.

Razor just shrugged and went into another frenzy, this time stabbing The Butterfly straight into Anub'seran causing him to fall like all the rest. Now, only Bradwarden was left to face this monster. He looked around and saw what Razor had done to his allies.

Razor: It's only you and me now Brad, what are you gonna do huh? You've seen how everyone else fell before me, I don't see any reason why you won't.

Bradwarden: You don't huh? Well then I guess I'll just have to show you!

Bradwarden charged into Razor, ignoring the lightning shield and his injuries and was able to knock back Razor causing the lightning shield to fire a charge at Centaur which he blocked with his double-edge which had a wooden handle that did not conduct lightning.

Razor: Smart...move Brad, that tackle actually hurt. But... How about this?

Again, Razor went into a frenzy but this one was different, it seemed that he used every single last bit of mana he had into this last frenzy. It was time to settle this once and for all.

Every single charge of lightning that came out of the Mjollnir was much more violent than the previous ones. But Bradwarden, headstrong and determined, again ignored this and charged right into Razor who could no longer evade attacks as well as he could as he stabbed The Butterfly into Anub'seran. This time, he was knocked down, but was able to land in a few hits on Centaur who nullified two of the attacks again with his double-edge but let three blast him with such intensity that even one as enduring as himself would be heavily injured by this.

Both him and Razor were heavily injured but Razor had the upper hand as he could easily shoot Bradwarden with one more intensified charge of lightning and kill him. But Bradwarden, realizing this, charged one last time into Razor who did as he expected, shot a charge of super-intensified lightning into him, almost killing him in the process. He knew that there was only one more choice he had...So in that one last desperate attempt, he struck Razor and himself with such intensity that The Lightning Revenant finally fell with Bradwarden in that epic battle.

Razor: How...could one...such as... you...defeat...me....

Bradwarden: This...was...retribution...for...for...everything....

And with that, the ancient armor finally shattered into pieces, the chaos was cleared but at the cost of these brave souls who made the greatest sacrifice this city might ever witness...
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1 month later, at the graveyard where the five were buried...

Muradin: Aye, he was the best sniper we ever had! I can't believe he's really gone now.

Furion: Rooftrellen, thank you for making this great sacrifice for us all.

Abaddon: Those Nerubians are truly heroes. Thank you Anub'arak, Anub'seran.

Nevermore: It's a shame that we lost the greatest and only leader we ever had. I still can't help but feel like I could have done something to help him. Maybe if I did, he would still be here with us today. I'm not sure if I will be able to follow in the footsteps of the boss.

Dazzle: Hey, you da boss man now. Ja don't need to follow in his footsteps man, instead, you should just lead to the best of your ability. I think it's what the boss would want too.

Khan: Yeah, what's passed has passed. All we can do now is work toward a good future by just doing what we can in the present...

Nevermore: You're right, we must not let the past get us down. My friends, let us all work toward a better future and let this sacrifice be an inspiration to us all! I believe that it is what they would want us to do as well...

Everyone: Yes! Towards a better future!!!

THE END
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Posted: Tue Dec 11, 2007 1:36 pm

Cool good one razorfane x wooohooooooooo three cheers for razorfane x hip hip huray, hip hip huray, hip hip huray
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Posted: Wed Dec 12, 2007 4:02 am

Yeah, I was getting bored of the story as well, nice ending
You should make a story by yourself Razorfane :P I'll be reading it if you decide to do so.
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Posted: Wed Dec 12, 2007 8:48 am

yeah this ones over but not the part about magina n' others at the school i yhink this story is still gonna continue theres still things like pudge's ultimate belly and magina being chased by two hot girls and stgyrwgyr(how to spell that???)and mortred still a lot of things and of course bane and the midgets
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Posted: Thu Dec 13, 2007 12:52 pm

Wow. Bard Man leave a subject alone for a while and a gang war breaks out... You made a pretty damn goood story Razorfane. Not exactly in tune with the subject, but pretty damn good. Bard Man has been thinking of doing a Noir DotA story. You interested?
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Posted: Fri Dec 14, 2007 7:25 am

What does Noir mean? And yeah I'm planning on making my own story. Still planning it out but I'll probably have a combat hero as my main character.
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Posted: Fri Dec 14, 2007 11:30 am

Yeah!! Bard Man's BACK WOOOOOHOOOOOOOO YEAH ALL RIGHT A NOIR STORY WASSUP UR SO COOL YAAAAAAAAAAAY
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Posted: Fri Dec 14, 2007 12:21 pm

Man that just awesome! More, more!
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What is noir? Is it france or sumthin'?
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Posted: Sat Dec 15, 2007 12:06 am

googles noir:
1. Of or relating to the film noir genre.
2. Of or relating to a genre of crime literature featuring tough, cynical characters and bleak settings.
3. Suggestive of danger or violence.

i'm guessing this is another round robin thing, if so i'm in.
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Posted: Sat Dec 15, 2007 12:29 am

the noir i know is some kind of black night .. or somethin black

noir is french?
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Posted: Sun Dec 16, 2007 3:58 am

Ok. Bard Man will have to paint you a Noir scene. But who to use... Ah! Got it!


-=-The sky was a bleak shade of gray that winter afternoon. A blanket of snow covered the entire city while one man sat in his office like a statue looking at wanted posters. His eyes were locked on one featuring Nevermore's ugly mug when the swung open. It was Layana, his secretary. Good at filing and even better in a fight. She marched up to the desk and layed a new poster down.*
"Here's a new bounty, Gondar. Good luck." *A smile went across the Bounty Hunter's face as he took up the poster. Looks like Balanar had been a busy boy. A cool thousand gold had been put up for fim. Dead or Alive.* "I'll be back in a few minutes. Don't wait up." *As he said that, he stood up and grabbed his favorite weapons, Sange and Yasha, and marched outside into the bitter cold.*
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That's the best Bard Man can do sober. No wine on hand at the moment.
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This is the point from which I could never retreat,
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This is the point from which I will die and succeed,
living the struggle, I know I'm alive when I bleed.
From now on it can never be the same as before,
cause the place that I'm from doesn't exist anymore.

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Posted: Mon Dec 17, 2007 10:36 am

Thanks for taking care of this topic guys!!!!!! I'm back and my computers ready, but I still have a lot of reading to do >_<
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