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A Comeback of Epic Proportions (Remade)
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A Comeback of Epic Proportions (Remade)
Posted: Tue Jan 22, 2008 1:35 pmA Comeback of Epic Proportions
*This is the remake of my previous story with the same title. I’m also going back to my previous style of writing. I’m still not experienced enough with using that other style of writing. It may not look as proper as the other one but hey, different people have different strokes right?
*This is the continuation to the Value of True Power. Now, as we pick up our story from there...
Sven woke up in an elven encampment and went outside and saw that the World Tree was safe at last. But he could not stop thinking about that demonic figure he saw in the smoke of the fires, about who this demon was and what was its purpose…
Chapter 1: The Start of a Return Long Due
Nortrom went back to his village where he became the best protector it ever had. Shendelzare, who was now a spirit, looked for a way to gain a more complete form. Luna Moonfang left with Sven and Magina and left the elven encampment to Lanaya, who had just returned from a training journey.
Sven along with his good friend Magina bid farewell to the Night Elves and the Scourge and Kalimdor behind them. That afternoon, they set up a boat by the shore and prepared to set sail once more as they did before but this time, with another companion.
As they sailed, they could feel the crisp sea breeze on their faces, they could see the sun setting on the horizon, and the waters were calm as can be. It could not have been a more perfect day for sailing. In fact, Sven had already fallen asleep when Luna broke the silence.
Luna: Magina.
Magina: What is it?
Luna: About our destination...
Magina: You want me to tell you about it, am I right?
Luna: Yes.
Magina: Alright then. Let's see, the elven fishing village where Sven and I come from is a simple and thriving place. You can always feel the breeze going though the place as we are experiencing now. The fish we catch are always fresh and full of life. Nothing has ever compromised the life of village or its people and I hope that it stays that way until the end of time.
Luna only responded with a silent nod and they continued on their way.
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Chapter 2: A Naval Ambush
That night as they were sailing, a full moon was out, the sea was still calm as can be, a crisp cool breeze filled the area and all of these provided such great conditions to just sleep soundly. However, Magina was still awake to steer the boat despite how tired he was from preparing and setting sail. A few minutes later, Sven woke up and offered to steer the boat for the night. Magina nodded, left the steering to Sven and fell asleep almost instantly.
They were still quite far from civilization when Sven saw something approaching their boat. He looked again and saw nothing. Believing that it was only his imagination, he continued on sailing.
All of a sudden, an anchor came from under the boat and smashed it into pieces which caused the other two to wake up. The group quickly found themselves in the water which was to their disadvantage especially now, that the enemy was submerged in the water once more.
Magina: Prepare your weapons and examine surroundings underwater. I have a feeling Leviathan may be planning an underwater attack!
Sven dove into the water with the Linken’s Sphere in hand and the Justice in the other. He found himself surrounded by a blue, translucent barrier that allowed him to move and breathe freely underwater while Magina and Luna were looking around to see if they could find the enemy.
Sven saw a dark figure quickly approaching him and with Justice in hand, launched another Storm Bolt. He flashed the Linken’s Sphere at it so that Luna and Magina could see it as well and they all realized that this creature was Leviathan, the monster with whom no seafarer is safe with.
Though what Sven did not know was that this is the monster that killed his parents at sea. He was only told that they were in an accident in order that he would not be traumatized during his childhood.
It was stunned and blinded by the bright light which the group took advantage of; slashing at it aggressively with all their weapons but Leviathan, being the monster that it was, shrugged off the damage as if it were nothing then swung its anchor violently which all three were fortunately able to avoid because of the water.
Of course, their attacks were slower here than on land due to the water. So Luna looked up, saw the moon shining brightly, and said some incomprehensible words and a beam of moonlight blasted through the water and hit Leviathan powerfully enough to cause it to retreat for the time being.
They resurfaced grabbed onto pieces of what was left of their boat, tied them together with some leftover rope from Sven’s backpack to make a raft and they went towards their destination with two pieces of wood serving as oars.
Luna: Phew, it’s a good thing the moon was as bright as it was. Otherwise, we might not have survived that.
Sven: Yeah, good thing but now that I think of it, somehow, Leviathan actually seems familiar to me. It’s as if I know it from somewhere but it’s hazy...
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Chapter 3: The Truth about the Past
After that incident with Leviathan, the group only had a small raft left to take them back to the village while Sven was busy wondering about where he had seen Leviathan before.
Sven: Magina, you’ve been awfully quiet since the battle. Is something bothering you?
Magina: Huh? Oh no, not really.
Sven: Ok then you won’t mind me asking you if you know anything about me and Leviathan?
Magina: No not at all, in fact, I have something very important to tell you about the accident with which your parents were involved in. Listen carefully; your parents were never in any accident.
Sven: What…what do…what do you mean?
Magina: Well, during a trip at sea to get some rare fish, they were attacked by Leviathan. It smashed their boat from underneath like what we’ve just experienced except your parents were not as lucky. They did not make it out of Leviathan’s ambush alive. I’m sorry that I’ve only told you this now Sven, it’s just that Syllabear and I agreed that it would be better to tell you at a later time as to not have traumatized you.
Sven…I don’t know what to say, or how I feel right now. I want to thank you for telling me the truth but I’m also quite angered that you’ve only told me this now…but for now, please just leave me to my thoughts. I’ve too much to think about…
Luna: Sven…
Sven: Please… just leave me be for now…
Luna: Alright. Magina, how much farther do you think is the village; the sun is starting to come up already.
Magina: It should not be much farther. I say we’ll probably get there when the sea glistens under the sunlight.
They rowed onward to the village where they might finally get some well-deserved rest…
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Chapter 4: Home Sweet home
As Magina said, they did arrive at the village when the sea was glistening beautifully under bright rays of sunlight. And as Magina described, the village was quite a sight; the ever present sea breeze, the simple yet sturdy houses built by elven engineers and of course, the wide, open shore with such fine sand.
They were welcomed by Aiushtha and a large companion of stone. He was quite a unique creature, such a craggy exterior that gave him away as one with a lot of strength and power and yet a wide, humorous looking smile on his face.
Aiushtha: Welcome back guys! Oh, I see you have a new companion.
Magina: Yes, this is Luna, the well-respected former leader of the Nordrassil Elven Defense Force.
Aiushtha: Oh, I see, welcome to our humble village! Oh yes, I also have someone to introduce; this is Tiny, a Stone Giant I found lost in the forest. He’s a great guy to have around; he has the strength that we elves lack for moving around large, heavy cargo!
Magina: You can see that just by looking at this guy!
Aiushtha: Yup. Hey Sven, you haven’t spoken since you arrived. Say something.
Magina: Err, Aiushtha, you’d best leave him alone first, I told him about the incident just recently.
Sven: No, it’s alright. It’s no use dwelling on the past. I realize that now. In fact Magina, I want to sincerely thank you for the consideration and telling me everything. Anyway, how are things around here?
Aiushtha: Nothing much except for Tiny here. Oh yeah, one of our hunters was attacked and terribly injured. Judging from his wounds, I’d say he was attacked by a pretty big creature with sharp claws. You want to go investigate it?
Sven: Of course but right after I get some sleep, I’m bushed.
Magina & Luna: Same here.
Aiushtha: Oh yes, of course, the journey here must’ve been long.
Sven: Not only that but we were also attacked by Leviathan. We’ll explain later, first we need to get some sleep…
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Chapter 5: The Demon Within
Magina and Luna woke up earlier than Sven later in the afternoon. They decided not to wake him up then they prepared their equipment and went with Aiushtha and Tiny into the forest.
They exited the boundaries of the village and entered the vast, dense forest. Above them was a darkening orange sky and around them were great trees and creatures big and small.
Aiushtha: These guys don’t attack unless provoked so just don’t bother them and it will be alright.
They journeyed deeper into the forest to the spot of where the attack had occurred and the skies were slowly becoming darker and darker.
Aiushtha: This is where the attack happened. Look around for anything suspicious.
Magina: Wait, I hear something from over there behind those trees…It’s coming this way. Prepare yourselves for anything.
???: I see you’re senses have gotten keen, elf.
Magina: I know that voice, it’s-
???: Yes, It is I, Strygwyr.
Aiushtha: Those claws! He’s the attacker! He’s the one who’s been attacking the hunters and the patrol all this time!
Strygwyr: Yes, I thirsted for blood when they just happened to be passing my way so I helped myself to a bloodbath. It felt as if all my strength had returned. Now, I know I can take all of you especially because I have this guy on my side.
From the shadows came Leviathan who had an even more powerful anchor than the last time. And this time, it was out for revenge.
Tiny stepped in front of Leviathan and confronted the feared monster. Leviathan raised its large anchor gave a huge roar that almost took Luna off her feet which Tiny responded to by grabbing the nearest tree, lifting it up as Leviathan did and gave a cry that many would normally cower from.
Strygwyr: No interference, this is between us two. Just to be sure… Hyah!
Strygwyr, with his corrupted shamanic magic, conjured up a sort of barrier that blocked anyone from entering.
Strygwyr: Magina, let’s get started!
Magina and Strygwyr were staring each other down, observing each other for the slightest error. However, both of them had such intense concentration that you could cut the tension with a knife!
Then, Strygwyr moved toward Magina with incredible speed and as he approached, he slashed outward with his claws but hit nothing. Magina blinked behind him and gave a slash of his own that hit Strygwyr right in the back. Strygwyr was on the floor, bleeding from his back.
However, instead of being hindered by this injury, he fought back with even greater speed. The scent of his own blood caused him to go into a blind rage. Even Magina’s blinking abilities were almost useless compared to the speed of this orc. Wherever, he went, Strygwyr would quickly dash toward Magina and slashed wildly.
Magina kept blinking and evading Strygwyr’s rage but he eventually blinked in the wrong direction out of panic and was not able to avoid the barrage of attacks from Strygwyr.
Magina was being ripped to shreds but luckily, he was able to blink just in time to avoid the fatal blow. During this short moment of safety, Magina felt nothing but rage, anger and hatred. He then gave out a battle cry that shook Luna and Aiushtha to their very foundations.
Strygwyr: Yes, that’s what I’ve been waiting for!
What stood before him was no longer Magina but a demon of rage. Strygwyr, acting as if nothing was different, ran toward the demon like he did with Magina and attempted to slash him. When he was about to make contact with the demon, his hand was burned by a flame that surrounded this demon. The demon then shot out a chaos blast burning with demonic energies towards Strygwyr, who was able to avoid the attack but saw that the tree hit by the blast was nowhere to be seen!
Demon: I’ll make you wish that you never existed!
This time, the demon shot out a chaos blast engulfed with the flames that burned Strygwyr’s hand. Strygwyr tried to get away but it was too late, the blast was too fast and powerful for him to avoid. When the blast made contact, not a sound was heard from Strygwyr as he no longer existed. He was no longer there. What gave away the fact that he was dead was the shamanic claw lying on the ground, burning…
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Chapter 6: Battle of the Titans
As the barrier dissipated, the demon just stood there while the others were doing battle with Leviathan.
Leviathan was a very tough opponent; its shell would always protect it at vital moments. Aiushtha attacked from a distance with impetus but Leviathan would easily shrug off the damage. One of Luna’s glaives had already broken when Leviathan deflected it with its anchor. She tried shooting a Lucent Beam at it but Leviathan, being a fast learner, avoided the beam with ease.
The only one who really stood a chance was Tiny, whose great strength was able to get past Leviathan’s defenses. Unfortunately, its tree clubs broke easily when they made contact with Leviathan’s anchor so he started fighting with his big, rocky hands.
At one point, Tiny even signaled Luna and Aiushtha to stand back. They were hesitant but trusted Tiny as he was the only one who stood a chance. Levithan then swung its anchor toward Tiny’s head which the stone giant was able to avoid. Then, Tiny grabbed the rocks below him and manipulated it as an attack directed towards Leviathan. Leviathan could do nothing to defend itself; the rocks were too spread out to defend from one direction.
It was stunned from the impact which Tiny took advantage of, tossing Leviathan up in the air with both hands. He grabbed the nearest tree, and swung it at full force at Leviathan as he made contact with the ground. Leviathan was knocked out. It was an incredible feat that none of them expected.
At this, the demon reacted. He shot a chaos blast towards the helpless Leviathan who in turn, was blasted out of existence. After this, it went after Tiny, who was not expecting the attack, and was knocked out cold. It was about to finish off the stone giant when the chaos blast was deflected by an enchanted blade, the Justice. Sven was then standing guard in front of the knocked out Tiny.
Sven: I can’t believe that none of you woke me up! It took me forever to get here! Now, to take care of this demon!
Luna: Be careful Sven, what you see before you was Magina!
Sven: What?! Fine, as friends, we will make him come to his senses!
The demon did not mind the fact that Sven had an enchanted blade and shot out a chaos blast towards him. Sven easily deflected this blast with the Justice away from him and into a nearby tree which was instantly obliterated. Sven was surprised but still focused. Luna then threw a glaive at the same time with Aiushtha’s impetus. The demon shot a chaos blast that burned the weapons.
Aiushtha saw that her impetus stood no chance so she healed Tiny instead. Luna had no more power left for a Lucent Beam so she stood back as well. Sven then charged at the demon, deflecting each blast shot at him with great skill but as he got close enough for an attack, he was burnt by a flame that surrounded the demon.
Sven knew what he had to do, so he stood there waiting for a blast and when it came he angled the Justice to be able to deflect the blast back to the demon. He did not expect it and was hit by his own blast, leaving him in a daze. Sven saw the opportunity, shot a Storm Bolt towards the demon then slashed the demon with a great cleave, leaving him unconscious.
Sven looked on at his opponent lying on the ground and it slowly morphed back into its previous form but this time, Magina had wings, horns and hooves…just like Terrorblade.
Sven: I’m glad that’s over; looks like he’s morphing back. Now, how about we finally head back home? It’s already dark.
Aiushtha & Luna: Sounds good.
And with that, the group headed home with the unconscious Magina.
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Chapter 7: An Unexpected Event
As they were going back, they could see a bright light emanating from the direction of the village.
Sven: The village sure is bright tonight.
Aiushtha: No, it can’t be! Sven look at the light more closely.
Sven: Ah! The village is on fire! Make haste!
When they arrived at the village, it was too late; it had already burned to the ground along with most of the elves who apparently tried to save their homes.
They looked around the remains of the once peaceful village. Aiushtha then spotted some survivors
Aiushtha: What happened here?
Survivor 1: A demon, a demon started this fire! It was, yeah, big with a sword engulfed in the flames of chaos. It had wings horns and hooves too!
Sven: Did it have glowing eyes?
Survivor 2: Yeah! It was one terrifying demon!
Sven: It must have been the demon, the mastermind of the attack on Nordrassil. I saw it after I killed Terrorblade. What could it be doing here? No, I can think of that later, right now, we must find a place where we can all stay.
Aiushtha: What about one of the neighboring villages?
Sven: Are there any? I haven’t seen any of them before.
Aiushtha There’s one in the forest. Our village has had good ties with them. I’m sure they’ll let us stay for a while.
Sven: Alright then, let’s go.
Aiushtha led the way through the forest. It was a long, twisting path and Sven did not know where they even were. After a few more twists and turns, they finally arrived in a small village bordered by trees.
All the houses were made of wood and some had plants growing out of it. It was also pretty cold in this deep part of the forest. However, the thing that stood out the most was the Tree of Life in the center of the village.
???: Oh, Aiushtha, it’s you. What do you need?
Aiushtha: Ah, elder, may we please stay here a while? Our village was attacked by a demon and it burned to the ground!
Elder: Oh, of course! You can all stay at that house.
The elder pointed to a rather large house and gave them all an assuring smile.
Elder: Don’t worry, that house is vacant. It used to be the village inn but since it was almost never used, we renovated it as a guest house. Feel free to use it as long as you want!
Sven: Thank you elder.
They entered the house and turned on the lights. It had enough room for everyone except for Tiny. The big guy understood the situation and slept outside instead.
They laid Magina in one of the rooms then they all went to their respective rooms and got some well-deserved rest.
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Chapter 8: The Upcoming Battle
The very next morning, Luna got up first. She then went to Magina’s room to check up on him and saw that he was still sleeping. She just couldn’t get her mind off the demonic power Magina displayed the previous night.
She stepped outside the house and she was greeted by the sight of flowers in bloom, birds flying about and majestic trees that only grew in that area of the forest.
Elder: Good morning, you’re up early. Is something bothering you?
Luna: Ah Elder, actually there is. You see, I have this feeling that my companions would want to hunt down that demon that burned down the village. The problem is that I don’t think any of us have a clue on where to start.
Elder: Ah yes, I see. Well why don’t you ask the Tree of Life? It’s been here, protecting our village for as long as I can remember.
Luna: Great Tree of Life, we seek the demon that caused all this trouble.
The Tree of Life closed its eyes, raised its hand then focused. The Tree of Life opened its eyes after a while and drew a circle on the ground. Luna looked at it carefully and saw the demon standing on a cliff overlooking a village. Beside the portal, the Tree wrote the words, “Lucifer, the Doom Bringer.”
Aiushtha: Hey, I know that place! It’s not far from here!
Luna: Oh, you’re awake. Good morning. Anyway, can you lead us there? It may be our only chance to face that demon.
Aiushtha: Sure but let’s wake up the others first.
They woke up everyone including Magina who was still a little dazed but ready to go. Strange thing though, the wings, horns and hooves were still present. Anyway, the group went off, bidding farewell to the elder, towards the village by the cliff side.
Sven: Finally, this may all come to an end. After we defeat this demon, let’s go and rebuild the village.
Luna: But what if-
Magina: No, we will not lose. For the future, we must not lose.
Aiushtha: Don’t worry, we can do this!
Tiny just nodded as they approached the cliff where they saw a group of five standing by the edge of the cliff overlooking the village.
One was a Skeleton that was much larger than any other that one might call it the skeleton king.
Second was Kel’thuzad, the Lich.
Third was a red lycanthrope demon with two wolf companions.
Fourth in the group was a familiar, dark figure that Luna identified as Mortred in her dark form.
Lastly, of course was Lucifer, the Doom Bringer, the true leader, the mastermind behind the attack on the World Tree.
The epic battle was about to begin.
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Chapter 9: The Epic Battle
Sven: Do not harm the village below! They have nothing to do with this!
Kel’thuzad: As you wish. Now let’s get started shall we?
It was an even five on five. Tiny went against the Skeleton, Magina went against the Lycanthrope, Aiushtha went against Kel’thuzad, Luna went against Mortred’s dark form and Sven went against Lucifer.
The skeleton was a powerful adversary and was evenly matched with Tiny. Every strike it attempted was easily blocked by Tiny who always counterattacked with a huge rock fist. However, the skeleton was always able to block the counter.
This kept on for some time and the skeleton was getting annoyed. It then attacked with a critical strike that hurt Tiny who responded by breaking the skeleton’s shield with his rocky fist. This left Tiny with a lot of good chances to attack.
He then felt to ground below him, stepped back a little and threw an avalanche of soil at the skeleton. While it was stunned, it signaled at Sven and tossed the skeleton towards him. Sven sliced the skeleton in half and all that was left was some sort of silver cross on top of the bone pile which started emitting a strange light. Tiny stepped on it, crushing it before it was able to complete whatever it was going to do. The skeleton was no more.
While this was happening, Aiushtha was throwing her impetus spears at Lich who froze these spears with ease. Lich then cast a Frost Nova spell at her, damaging her quite a lot and almost knocking her out. She then summoned her healing wisps which healed her and her companions. Lich just looked on, raised his hand then launched a huge frost nova which hit everyone once except for Aiushtha who was hit twice and left lifeless on the ground.
Tiny then hit the Lich in the back who was able to create an armor of frost just in time to avoid greater damage. The Lich was hurt but still able to fight. He had no more energy for another frost nova so he started shooting ice shards at Tiny. Tiny was too slow to avoid the ice shards so he was getting beaten up badly.
Magina noticed this even though he was still fighting with the lycanthrope, and shot out a green light at the Lich. Since he had no magical energy left, he could barely even get up anymore after the hit. Tiny finished him off with a great stomp and the Lich disappeared forever.
Tiny was about to retreat from the area when Lucifer shot a red coil of demonic magic at him. Tiny fell to the ground, motionless and lifeless.
So now, only three from each side were left. Luna, Sven and Magina were disheartened by the loss of their friends at the hands of these demons but were motivated now, more than ever to win this battle.
Luna threw another glaive at Mortred who easily avoided everything Luna had hit her with because of this new, dark power that she wielded. Luna then shot a lucent beam at Mortred who was not able to avoid it this time around and was down for the count. Luna then went nearer then shot multiple lucent beams at Mortred. Her dark form dissipated into nothingness but all the force of the multiple lucent beams suddenly returned to Luna. It was a special dispersion magic from the dark form of Mortred that returns damage to the user so Luna was killed by her own strength.
Now, Magina was having a hard time with this lycanthrope; everywhere he turned, one of the two wolves would jump out at him causing him to defend himself. He then just blinked out of the way of the lycan who tried an attack against him.
This had already dragged on for some time so the lycanthrope himself morphed into a wolf. Magina noticed his movements were much faster and powerful so he killed the two other wolves that jumped at him. This time however, he was hit critically in the chest by the lycan’s wolf form. Magina was bleeding from the hit and did his best to defend himself. However, the lycan summoned the wolves back and Magina’s situation was looking bad.
Sven couldn’t help his friend however, as one false move would allow Lucifer to tear Sven in half with the sword that burned of infernal flames. It’s a good thing though that the Justice equaled the chaos blade in power.
Magina was now surrounded and was standing on the edge of the cliff. He did not feel any anger, nor rage, but determination. Determination to win and be able to rebuild the place he calls home.
He was filled with unwavering determination and again, morphed into a demon although this time, he was not out for blood, he was out for the future of his home and had full control of his demonic powers at last.
The wolves could not even get near him because of the flames surrounding him so he took the opportunity and blasted them all into oblivion. Every single blast that he shot was burning with such an intense flame, that not even the lord of hell would be able to stand it!
The wolves all burned to the ground including the Lycanthrope, who gave out an almost pitiful howl before being reduced to mere ashes.
At this, Magina morphed back into his elven form but the wings, horns and hooves were gone. He had gained control over the demon within and had now regained his freedom from the demonic curse. From that moment on, he swore never to use that demonic power again.
Sven was still fighting Lucifer even after all this time had passed. He saw Magina dealing the final blow to the Lycanthrope then he gave him a signal telling him to go before Lucifer kills him.
Magina was hesitant to leave his friend but eventually trusted that Sven would come back safely in one piece. With that, he blinked out of the area, leaving only Sven and Lucifer on the cliff.
Sven was already weary from fighting for such a long time with a demon this powerful. In fact, Sven had not landed even a single attack on the demon but the demon had not hit Sven as well.
Sven knew that he had to end this battle quickly for Lucifer had the advantage in terms of stamina and he was already weary from the fight.
Lucifer though, was getting bored of his adversary and wanted to see his true strength so Lucifer burned the village below with no effort at all. Sven was infuriated by this injustice to those innocents in the village and he gave a great battle cry that shattered the earth below them.
After that, he felt a great strength surging through him as before with Terrorblade. It was as if a god had lent him some strength. He charged forth with everything on the balance. This last attack would determine if he would come out of this alive or not.
And with all the strength he could muster, Sven made a great cleaving motion with the Justice that shattered the chaos blade that Lucifer was holding as well as the very earth below them. The strike was so powerful that the whole cliff collapsed and caused a landslide. Sven and Lucifer were caught in this landslide and went with it until it made contact with the ground below.
When the smoke from the impact cleared, all that was left was the corpse of a demonic figure that compromised the future of all…
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Final Chapter: The Conclusion
Sven had gone back to where the village used to be and saw Magina working on the rebuilding of it.
Sven: Magina, we have finally conquered the threat to our lives but at the cost of our friends’.
Magina: I know it is disheartening but we mustn’t give up on what lies ahead. Onward to a better future my friend, I’m sure that it is also what our friends would want.
Sven: I know this but still find it hard to believe that they have passed on. We should at least create a proper grave for each of them to remember them by.
Magina: I have already finished it. Here…
Magina brushed away a few bushes nearby and Sven saw three rather large stone aligned in a small row with etchings on them. One had an etching of Aiushtha on it and the other two had etchings Luna and Tiny.
Magina: I did not make these. I found them right there on tat very spot. It’s as if that nature itself had created these tombstones for those three who fought ‘till the very end.
Sven: Yes, it is a mind-boggling mystery but it somehow sends a message of reassurance that they are in a better place now, and that we, who are left here on this earth, are to work harder toward a better tomorrow today for the sake of the ones we truly care for…
And that, my friends, is the end.
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Errrrr!
This is too long.
I think 9 out of 10 of the members that will open this thread will not read this.
Just a suggestion, Post each part of your story with Intervals, like posting it every 3 days.
That way they wouldn't find reading your story boring.
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I think my Mother is an Alien
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Agree with killmore.
but your stories are great please keep more coming
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You've only lost your mind.
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Wow it's long :S umm i read the first two chapters, they're really good. ummmm just the one sentence that isn't that great.
"Luna only responded with a silent nod and they continued on their way."
Makes luna a sort of enigmatic character when as you read further on he's not.
Oh and the fact that leviathan killed Sven's parents feels pretty insignificant but it's a good idea.
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The people we have lost...and the dreams that have faded...never forget them...
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On the eigth day the lords said "let there be awesomeness" and there was me.
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Yeah, I kinda lost that theme of Luna in the story. The reason why I also mentioned Leviathan and Sven's parents was for extra (though maybe insignificant) character development. Thanks for the feedback. By the way, it's really hard to be able to develop so many characters along the way. Might have been the reason why it's long
The next story I'm planning will be shorter with maybe less characters. I'll just leave you guys with the clue that my main character will be from The Scourge.
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i read teh whole story.
real nice. I congragulate u, RazorFane. Niceeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee_________________
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