This story is about anu'barak, anub'seran n broodmother, what do you think ? :D

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History of Nerubian Kingdom

Posted on Mon Dec 21, 2009 12:29 pm

Chapter 1

"Intro"
Far in Azeroth, there was an insect kingdom named " Nerubian ".
The queen that time is Black Arachnia's mother, named Blue Arachnia.

That time, Broodmother was study at a famous school of spider in nerubian kingdom. She has 2 best friend, first named Anu'barak, and the second is Anub'seran.
They always play each other, until they are 15 years old, that time is the era of war of spider. So, young male insect would be taken as armies. And the female one will become strategiest.
Broodmother's mother is a queen, so broodmother will become the next queen of course, so she must command Nerubian's special armies, which there are Anu'barak and Anub'seran.

Two of them are falling in love to Broodmother, but broodmother true love is anu'barak, that's why, anub'seran hate anu'barak so much.

In Nerubian armies' tent:
Broodmother : Anuuu'baraaaaakkk
Anu'barak : I coming darling
Broodmother : This is our first war, are you ready?
Anu'barak : Of course, let us do this
Broodmother : Yeah, we must win this war

Anub'seran is very, very hate anu'barak because of broodmother, so he has a plan to kill anu'barak when the war begin. That's the beginning of the bloody three friends.

To be continued...

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Posted on Mon Dec 21, 2009 12:38 pm

I hope you guys like this fan fic

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Posted on Mon Dec 21, 2009 12:45 pm

dude,your english is wayyyyyyyyyyy bad.... and besides the story sucks
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Posted on Mon Dec 21, 2009 1:44 pm

I think you should improve your english. Try reading books, trust me it helps.

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Posted on Mon Dec 21, 2009 1:52 pm

needs more originality

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Posted on Mon Dec 21, 2009 2:05 pm

nerubians playing with each other till their 15? and their kingdom is not called "Nerubian", the Nerubian LIVED in Azjol'nerub. And broodmothers of the nerubian where nerubian, not spiders, like BM.

otherwise the story..sucks lol, a love affair between the nerubians just seems plain stupid. especially considering that anub'arak is not even alive anymore being raised as a Crypt Lord by Ner'zhul. And he actually was the king of the Nerubian till that. im nerdy about these things but still srsly..

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Posted on Mon Dec 21, 2009 5:06 pm

Oh god, a typo infested chibi version of undead royalty spidermonsters!!
You will not get to far with this story but atleast the weird english gave me a headache! Good try, better luck next time
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Posted on Mon Dec 21, 2009 5:37 pm

Dude this st0ry is s0o0o0o0 GAY!! And yes y0u sh0uld try t0 impr0ve y0ur english a little bit..
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Posted on Mon Dec 21, 2009 5:38 pm

the story isnt epic...
you have to play the warcraftIII campaign from REIGN OF CHAOS to FROZEN THRONE.
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Posted on Mon Dec 21, 2009 6:00 pm

Screwed Plot.
Screwed English.
Screwed Originality.

No offence, but at least get some proper grammar.

AND

They always play each other

Even ignoring the grammatical error, it sounds really sick.
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Posted on Mon Dec 21, 2009 9:47 pm

Give the guy a break, he's probably learning English. His grammar reminds me of a Malaysian friend of mine, so he's most likely asian. However, he double posted. GET HIM!
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Posted on Mon Dec 21, 2009 9:49 pm

lol tokemus crucify him double post omg

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Posted on Mon Dec 21, 2009 9:52 pm

Seriously though, guys, chill on the negative comments. Remember his other thread? The guy is depressed. No need to lead him further into the abyss.
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Posted on Mon Dec 21, 2009 9:53 pm


Just as you should attempt to locate your "o" key, a dictionary and some brainpower.

On topic, I'll second what others have said -- good try but work on grammatical issues and general plot development. Give fanfics another shot at some point though, can't hurt.

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Posted on Mon Dec 21, 2009 10:35 pm

You wanna see bad, you should see the chapters i was writting before Guns corrected them...

Give the guy a break..Sure, the idea of 2 spiders/nerubians being in love, kissing and possibly doing it isn't pleasant, but give him some credit for trying..

Deathcrush

Lame is lame, and you are seriously gay...replacing o with 0 doesn't make you cool, but irritating, making you the target of the mod's wrath...do have that in mind next time you post...they can be quick with handing out bans...

Alpine

Nice flame, mind me using it sometimes?
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