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"The Fall of Damnation 5 - Dawn of Darkness"

Posted: Sat Sep 20, 2008 1:55 am

Please read the The Fall of Damnation 4 back in the Fan Fic Section so you may not be misguided. Also it was supposed to be Yurnero there, not Axe. Advised if you read from the beginning.

-CHAPTER 1-

The first hall leading to the Frozen Throne was large and dimly-lit. Only a few candles from the sides are visible through the eye.

"Where's the next door?", Squee asked.

"I know it when I sense it...there!", said Rikimaru, pointing somewhere to the far end of the hall. Though he cannot see, he was sure.

Brimstone... , he thought.

"Let's go.", said Yurnero to the others. Rikimaru led the way. The rest followed. Raigor stayed behind.

"What's wrong Raigor?", Tiny asked. Everyone looked at Raigor in the middle of the room, as if in a trance.

"..."

"RUN!--Gahh!", Raigor shouted in pain. He took a powerful blow at the side, sending him to the ground. Then another, and another.

"Come on, we can take him on!", Tiny said.

"No! Purist and the others do not have much time. GO!!", Raigor. He smacked his totem in the ground and gave a large growl.

"Raigor...", Squee stood and stared at Raigor despite the falling debris. The courage ironically seen despite his blinded vision.

"We have to go Squee, Raigor is closing the hall!", Tiny urged.

Raigor looked at Squee in the eye, assuring him with a nod.

Go...

...I'll take care of the traitor.

-CHAPTER 2-

Leviathan launched and launched attack after attack. Bradwarden did so in return. The clash was epic. The ghouls and other ally armies did not dare go near them, as they can be crushed beneath their bare feet.

"Mighty centaur, yer skills are tremendous!", Leviathan praised sarcastically.

"So as you, Tidehunter. Hiyahh!", Bradwarden drove his axe forcefully into Leviathan's anchor. Levaiathan blocked the axe but was hit by Bradwarden's sudden kick by the hoof. Leviathan stumbled to the ground. Bradwarden stared at him.

"Get up, Tidehunter.", Bradwarden said. Leviathan was infuriated and intimidated by this.

"Nobody pushes me to teh ground..."

"Nobody!", Tidehunter splashed water right onto Bradwarden's face. He charged in an angered rage.

"Graaarr!"

-CHAPTER 3-

Purist was weakening from Abbadon's attacks. He saw no weakness in him, no sign of fatigue. He on the other hand took another blow from Abbadon, the icy chill swelling in his nerves.

Demonic... , he thought.

"You should've thought twice before you battled me", Abaddon said. "Now I have to kill you, just like the way I killed the rest of your knights". He neared Purist. Purist staggered back.

The battles at the other ends were in tension too. The numbers of deaths were increasing, more bodies lay on the barren wasteland. Auishta, Nortrom, and Rooftrellen were in a back and forths battle. Their enemies were as good as them.

Mirana and Traxex were also in tension too. Their commanded army is mostly taking half of the Scourge's creeps.

While Traxex was busy killing ghouls one after another she saw a figure from not far away. She cannot recognize the face as several other creeps were blocking her sight.

...or maybe it didn't have one.

With a perfectly timed shot she released her arrow. In between the ghouls and elves in the way it passed with pinpoint accuracy.

But...

...with a blink of an eye...

...it was gone.

Enemy... , she thought. She called Mirana's attention.

"Be careful.", Traxex said to her. Mirana nodded. She understood what she was talking about. They were not alone.

-CHAPTER 4-

Raigor looked around the vast, dark hall.

"Coward! Show yourself!!", he shouted out. He slammed his totem in the ground and it lit up.

"I know who you are", he said. He took another blow.

"Traitor...", he said.

Raigor stood still in the middle of the hall, waiting for an answer. A few moments passed and he was going to say something again when he was interrupted.

A low voice laughing, so menacing, so booming. The structure of the hall made the vioce echo throughout the room. It was hard for Raigor to trace where it came from.

"You should've let your friends stay. This is going to be less entertaining I guess...", the figure laughed again.

A dim light appeared infront of Raigor, swinging left and right. A pair of glowing eyes appeared too. Beneath it, Raigor can the see creature grin.

"I see they call you Stonehoof now. Nice name", Barathrum said, appearing vividly in the shadows. He laughed again.

"Sad to say you didn't have one. Cowards do not deserve them anyway", Raigor said. He charged at Barathrum.

Barathrum saw Raigor's glowing totem.

Crude, easy to evade... , he thought.

But it seems that the totem gets bigger than he thought. Alot bigger.

-CHAPTER 5-

"Furion! Ye alrayt in der?", Zeus called over. Furion was too busy to answer. Kel-Thuzad was more powerful than he thought.

"Take this monster!", Furion boomed. A wave rippled through his scepter, peircing its way to the Lich.

Kel'Thuzad launched his own. A blue orb paved its way. As the two forces meet, the overflow of their power spread throughout their battle field.

"Wow", Zeus said. He looked back at his own battle nevertheless.

As he was busy thundering the numerous creeps that charge infront of him, he saw what was leading them.

A floating piece of armor, clad in blue, with a face as cold as the Lich, thunder just like Zeus' own. It shot a bolt of lightning at Zeus. Zeus was taken aback by the shot.

"Useless piece uf metal! Ye dare hit teh god uf lightnin and thunder?!", Zeus glowed and drove his power straight into the field onto the revenant. The lightning was powerful enough to split the revenant's army into two. The powerful blow blew and shook the earth. Smoke rose up above the atmosphere.

"Bah...", Zeus smiled and spat to the ground.

As the smoke disappeared there still stood the revenant, static electricity running through its armor. It shot another wave of lightning at Zeus. Zeus tried to block the shot but it was more powerful than ever.

It's absorbing my power...

"By the gods of Olympia...", he whispered to himself.

TO BE CONTINUED...
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Posted: Sat Sep 20, 2008 2:29 am

i like it...
but some things could be made more clear
especially the beginning
i read it and i was like whaaat?
but yeah, overall good job!
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Posted: Sat Sep 20, 2008 5:13 am

you have to read from the very beginning so you can understand it

Fall of Damnation 1 to 5...
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Posted: Sat Sep 20, 2008 6:00 am

nice story, pls continue.
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Posted: Sat Sep 20, 2008 6:21 am

huh are you the original author for the fall of damnation?
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Posted: Sat Sep 20, 2008 6:30 am

hehe, yep. i made a new account a long long time ago, haha ironic eh?
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Posted: Sat Sep 20, 2008 6:31 am

aww...nice one =)
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Posted: Sat Sep 20, 2008 6:45 am

Except a few grammar mistakes, its good.
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Posted: Sat Sep 20, 2008 6:53 am

I like the style of writing these story. The story runs fast and yet exciting even every chapters are short.
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Posted: Mon Sep 22, 2008 12:17 pm

nice. i like story. pls continue
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Posted: Mon Sep 22, 2008 12:24 pm

Ah I know a good fanfic when I see one. This I like.
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Posted: Mon Sep 22, 2008 3:58 pm

Flame likey. Moawr! Now me shall have to go find the first 4 parts. TT
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Posted: Sat Nov 01, 2008 10:45 pm

nice, even tho im late to the party haha

btw, continue this!!!!!!!! its very good!
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