Forlorn Clones - Chapter 4, Spiritual World

Posted: Thu Sep 18, 2008 10:27 am

nice chapter!!! keep going
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Posted: Thu Sep 18, 2008 10:37 am

i didnt look this site up. sorry >.<. Newayz apart for a fwew obvious mistakes nothing much. Pretty good story. likey
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Posted: Thu Sep 18, 2008 12:50 pm

lol, nothing like that, ur story's good.
Plz continue
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Posted: Tue Oct 07, 2008 1:36 pm

long time since i visited.....
u dont seem to be getting a lot of viewers...
perhaps if u advertise it in ur sig?

the storyline is quite okay but it is a bit hard to understand.....

and i would suggest not using technical dota terms(collision and others...)as if u are describing game...

instead use a more subtle way like maybe instead of zero collision, u could use"the bites passed through his body" to get the feel that its not a game but a fantasy story....

keep up the good work!
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Posted: Tue Oct 07, 2008 1:39 pm

long time since i visited.....
u dont seem to be getting a lot of viewers...
perhaps if u advertise it in ur sig?

the storyline is quite okay but it is a bit hard to understand.....

and i would suggest not using technical dota terms(collision and others...)as if u are describing it as a game...

instead use a more subtle way like maybe instead of zero collision, u could use"the bites passed through his body" to get the feel that its not a game but a fantasy story....

keep up the good work!

oh and the mischief thing shoul be mischevious because mischief is a noun and cannot be used to describe
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Posted: Thu Oct 09, 2008 12:17 pm

maybe this thread is dead?
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Posted: Sat Oct 11, 2008 6:08 am

well, I've kind of given up on this story, because I had too many ideas, and all of them were just going everywhere, and lazyness is also a critical reason.
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Posted: Mon Oct 13, 2008 2:01 am

lol

well i think if its possible u should continue
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Posted: Thu Oct 16, 2008 1:42 pm

yea we all love dotamorph's stories correct? you have proven yourself to become one of the legendary writers on DS so please continue. It's what i use to read when i have spare time. Im actually reading...
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