Murderous Intent

Murderous Intent

Posted on Tue Sep 08, 2009 2:39 pm

I guess you can say that I'm back... anyway, here's what I came up with recently.
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There were two silhouettes that could be seen along the walls of the small, windowless room that was dimly-lit by a single candle. There was no proper ventilation and the already hot air was stuffy; how heavenly these conditions were!

In the center was a young woman who was gagged as well as bound to the wooden chair that she sat on, wore a simple outfit of a t-shirt and baggy shorts and was too scared to even struggle to get out of her predicament. In front of her was a tall man who was perspiring heavily, wore a thick black jacket, torn-up jeans and was sharpening the rusty butcher’s knife he held one hand. They could see each other clearly in the dim light which made the young woman feel uncomfortable as she began to sweat as well.

The man finished sharpening his knife and then said, “Does it not excite you, that feeling you get right before you die? The anxiety, the uncertainty, the incredible mix of feelings, oh it gets my adrenaline pumping just thinking about it! Then there comes a feeling of pure hopelessness just as that incredible wave of seething pain enters your body and slowly envelops your entire being. It is truly exhilarating and I am glad that I can finally let you experience this,” the man named Levi Seretta said with a crazed smile that reached from ear to ear.

He drew his blade and put the broad side upon her cheek. You could see the dread in her eyes as the cold steel caressed her face tenderly. He pulled it away and thrusted it forward while she closed her eyes and braced herself. When she felt nothing, she opened here eyes to encounter the tip of the blade that was just a few centimeters from her eyes. He then cut her ropes, removed her gag and let her move about as she wanted. He let out a sigh of relief after.

“So, aren’t you going to punch me or even yell for help? There is only one way to get in and out of this room so if you called for help, I couldn’t do a thing. I mean, this room may be small and windowless but it sure as hell isn’t soundproof.” he dared her.

“I-It’s because I don’t know how I feel right now, I mean s-someone who was about to kill m-me actually released me at the last second…why did you-” she said softly, fearfully when Levi cut her off, saying, “I do not wish to kill anyone,” he said with an intense seriousness that contradicted his previous look,

“S-so why do you-”

“-do this, is that right?”

She only answered his interruption with a silent nod. He pulled out another wooden stool from under the table where the blade sharpener was and sat on it quietly with his head down as if he was thinking of what he could say. For a minute, there was a very tense silence that hung about the dense air. He then spoke up and began to narrate his story.

“I was in your position around two years ago and I too, was spared but not because my would-be killer did like I did to you, no. I was saved by a detective who managed to find me right as the madman raised his knife. He ran in there and stopped it right as it was about to make contact with my eye…”

“That...that must h-have been a horrible experience,” she said, still feeling unsafe in the presence of this insane man.

“It was at first… I mean I didn’t know whether I would die right there and then or bleed to death after he stabbed me. That experience didn’t traumatize me though. In fact, after some time, it gave me new life; it made me realize how valuable, how precious life really is,” he said with a sincere smile that allowed her to breathe more easily.

“By letting others experience this feeling, I can make them realize the value of the life that they have been taking for granted,” he continued with that same smile.

“B-but to go to such extremes is simply wrong!” she said nervously but strongly in the hopes of hiding her fear.

“Ah, but in what way? Would you have valued your life more if I simply just told you to?” He said with a slight frown of disappointment which she answered with silence.

“I didn’t think so. Man is stubborn and full of pride; they do not accept their faults and pay no heed to the advice of others, be it good advice or really poor advice. I go to these drastic measures precisely for that reason. Man’s extreme pride must be faced with an equal extreme of degradation and what better way to break any man’s pride than to make him beg for his life like a dog,” he reasoned like it was the simplest thing in the world, “there are many ways to see a person’s true colors such as putting them in power, eating with them during a meal or putting them under the knife. Of course, you know I prefer the third method.” He said with a grim look.

“But hasn’t anyone come after you for doing these vile acts?” She asked without stuttering.

“Actually, no, I’ve never been threatened or hunted down. Perhaps they are afraid. So, will you be the first?” he asked

“Y-yes, o-of course… well, truth be told, no, I simply can’t,” she said, her stuttering revealing her initial dishonesty.

“I notice that you stutter not only when you’re nervous or scared but also when you lie. It makes you so readable that it’s quite cute,” he said with an irresistibly charming smile.

“Hey, don’t tease me!” she replied, her face red as a ripe tomato.

“Fine, going back on track, why can’t you report my acts? I mean, I don’t know where you nor your family lives so I have nothing on you; I can’t hunt you down,” he asked with a look that showed that he was looking for a certain answer.

“I guess it’s because, in some really sick way, you’re still right…”

“Exactly; this is what the others have realized as well. Sure, my ways may be considered extreme and criminal by this failing society but in essence, I know that what I’m doing is right and I will defend my beliefs until I die,” he said with a burning passion and a firm resolve.

“So what do you plan to do from here?”

“Isn’t it obvious to you yet? I will simply continue,” he shook his head and shrugged.

“Well, you could-” was all she could say before she was interrupted by the abrupt opening of the door and a loud, boisterous voice.

“Freeze! Drop the weapon and come with me!”

So I’ve been found… interesting but I will not allow myself to fall to the dregs of a failing society!

“I said drop the weapon!”

“I’m not deaf, officer. Calm down or you might have a heart attack or something. I’m going to drop my weapon now,” deep into your body.

Levi threw the rusty butcher’s knife toward the officer who deflected it with his gun as if by reflex. The officer however, was not able to do the same with the second knife that Levi forced through his heart. As the officer started to color the concrete floor a crimson shade, Levi’s eyes lit up with a mad lust for blood.

“I had no idea that this was the kind of feeling you get after killing…” he said softly.

“I’m sure it must feel absolutely horrible that you have to live knowing that you took a life. I don’t know the feeling exactly but my father felt that he could not repent for the lives he took as a police officer even if it was for the good. He jumped off a 50-storey building because he just couldn’t live with himself any longer,” she said with her eyes tearing up.

“Terrible? Don’t you mean incredible! This thrilling rush, the smell of blood, the blade in my hand, they have awakened me to the truth! People who don’t value life should just die then! There’s no need to bother with reforming them, we can simply be rid of them. Now that I think of it, I can’t even be sure if those whom I’ve threatened would really change for the good I have been so blind all this time, why; if I had not wasted so much time, think of all the useless people I could have gotten rid of already!” Levi exclaimed at the top of his lungs with his eyes wide as an owl’s and a toothy grin that made him look as if he was no longer human.

“No, don’t do this! You have to snap out it!” she said, with tears dripping from her eyes.

“Yes, I can never be sure about anything; there is no guarantee that you or anyone else will change so I will remove that uncertainty for good,” he continued as if he never heard what she said.

She was about to say something in reply when he gently placed his finger upon her tender lips and whispered, “I’ll miss you, my precious Angel.” Moments after, he slit her throat and left her corpse right beside the officer’s.

Your death was more exciting, more beautiful than the last. I love how you shed tears before you shed blood but it still ended too quickly. I mean, you didn’t even cringe in pain for at least a few seconds… he almost looked sorrowful at this point of his train of thought.

I guess I’ll just have to come up with a slower, more agonizing death that will make my victims cry their eyes out and wish that they I end their infinite misery. The best part of this whole thing is that before they die, they would have realized how much more they could have done with their hopeless excuses for lives. They will die with endless regret in their hearts that they will never be able to do anything about their lives again. No second chances, no repentance, no last goodbyes, no fulfillment, nothing. It’s just such a perfect ending to such a wasted life. I guess it’s time to start over…
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Last edited by RzfX on Wed Sep 09, 2009 11:49 am; edited 1 time in total

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Posted on Wed Sep 09, 2009 1:15 am

Well well look who's back with a bang! Will read the whole thing tmrw though, got loads of assignments now
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Posted on Wed Sep 09, 2009 12:14 pm

one word... creepy...
nice descriptions of a person addicted at killing.. it really did gave me the chills..
but anyway.. I do believe that this isn't dota-related.. but I won't stick to that.. if this might ever be dota-related.. maybe it's naix' story..

so far.. you've got a nice starting chapter.. as you always do... alright.. i'm waiting... finally i'm getting started with one of your stories..
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Posted on Wed Sep 09, 2009 12:18 pm

Dota-related stories are not that interesting for me, so I always welcome the change for general topics.. No wonder my Dota fan-fic is rotting back in here somwhere!
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Posted on Wed Sep 09, 2009 12:45 pm

^ lolwut varun
i'm just assuming.. and hopefully rzfx will slip us some hints...
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Posted on Wed Sep 09, 2009 12:52 pm

Actually, I was planning for this to be a one-shot thing but I do like the idea of continuing it so you can really expect more morbid scenes sometime in the future.

By the way, this is not dota-related. The name of the character actually has a meaning behind it. You just need to play around with the letters a bit.
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Posted on Wed Sep 09, 2009 1:20 pm

Hi Evil but where's Good?

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Posted on Wed Sep 09, 2009 2:52 pm



Well, you can arrange Levi to make Evil but what about his last name? It's significant too. In fact, the name, Levi Seretta just comes from one word. I'll tell you at the end of the story if none of you figure it out by then.
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Posted on Sat Sep 12, 2009 6:00 am

Heres a question, did you try to guy for a message, a cool experience or lasting appeal?

Good not great.(I always wanted to say that) Nah, I'm messing with you. Its good.

One thing though, you shoudl've put some contrast. Some sort of normalcy so that the dramatic scenes would appear a lot more real and dramatic.
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Posted on Sat Sep 12, 2009 6:31 am

Good start although it seems like you could make it flow a little better. It seems like its either choppy or dragged out in some parts ><. Maybe I think that cuz im used to reading Nabakov and Steinbeck lol. Very interesting though.
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Posted on Tue Sep 15, 2009 9:54 am

I'm not sure if I'm even going to continue with this or not so I can't really call it a start but it's not really an end either as of now.

I'm busy so I may just leave this as is.

edit: Silent, could you explain the contrast and normalcy you're talking about? I don't really get what you mean by that.
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