Hmm little overpowered imo. Looks nice otherwise.

Well, dude, you have to work a LOT in balancing this thing out....
The idea is nice, so is the name, but her abilities are well, imba....
The first skill may look nice, but if you cut the bonuses by say, 50% and take out the whole "killer gets stunned and damage over time" thing....
The second skill could be nice, but lower the initial damage a bit, say, 75/100/125/150, otherwise it's too powerful... Oh and lower the manacost too....
The third skill is WAYYYYYYY too powerful, I mean, you get a PASSIVE +8 armor, PLUS an armor aura, AND you decrease the opponent's armor too...
My advice....take it out, think of something else, because you can't have that many bonuses on a single, non-ulti skill....
And the ultimate, well, the thing is too powerful, he's ranged, he lifesteals for Nakkara, he has dodge, critical, 2500 life, a lot of damage, AND a nuke....
Seriously man, tone it down, it's really imba now....
Let's see what you come up with, and then I'll rate...

hmmmm well... as i dont look much to hero ideas, i mentioned this one and took a look. in my first opinion i really loved it but when i started to think about it... well.. lets say a newcomer can become beyond godlike with it...
it is far to imba. the hero base is nice, but the skills are too good.
i would say.. balance them out, espacially the ulti and then let it be rated

Micha.

way too overpowered would ruin game to play against

Well, for the first three bilities yeah, I am really doubtful. I know, but it is always a begnners dream to become imba. But I feel like the last spell is not that bad, since it is only for 12 seconds. And I just played a hero with assault curass (slardar) adn I now know how devastating it can be, so here is my thoughts. I need confirmation before I go ahead and edit it.

1st ability: No bonus attack damage. Attack speed increases 5,10,15,20 percent. Half all the stun times and add 10 second for each level of cooldown.

2nd ability: 0.5, 0.7, 1.0, 1.2 seconds. Initial damage is 75/100/125/150. Bonus damage is +10/18/25/33 per unit. Veneturers damaged by 25/50/75/100

3rd ability: Hotkey S, activatable ability. Lasts 7 seconds and cooldown of 45 seconds at all times. Self bonus armor increase is 1.5/2.5/3.5/4.5, her armor increase does not stack up with her aura. But lasts 7 seconds and has a long cooldown. Mana cost 100/115/130/145

Ulti: hp's are 500/1025/1500, lasts 10 seconds, has no armor, only one charge of creep nuke at all levels, has set damage and is not effected by Nakkara's items. Attack speed is 1.35 at all levels. Dodge is 10/15/20 % and critical is x1.5. Nacharius heals 15%, 30%, 45% of what he inflicts.

If you have any more suggestions on balancing it, feel free to do so.

And only one ability may be active at a time. Otherwise, she blows up and pawns every allied and enemy hero on the map and gets a full inventory of divine rapiers :P seriously, no ability may be used together. Maybe I should plant a silence after each spell . . .

Tnhx for all the comments BTW, I was expecting a more of STUPID n00b G3t da HELL OUTTA HERE! and a little less of just balance it and it is nice.

This strategy is okay but you need to balance more things.

BAAAAAARD MAAAAAN!!!
*Flies in through a wall*
Time to weigh your hero on the Bard Man Scale >=)

Eternal Love Pact: Hmmm... Pretty Imba. Not only does it give you a hell of a huge boost to speed and hp regen, but it could be activated just before you're gonna die. REMOVE that stun.

Kinetic Chaos: Really Imba. Lower that inital damage bigtime and put a cap on how much damage can be added.

Satanism: lower the self-boost to armor and it'll be fine.


Ghost Of Nacharius: Jesus. This one is on a razor's edge. O_o Ok, on one hand, it's a perfect way to nullify a creep push and heal yourself at the same time, but on the other hand, it has uber damage and Critical strike, but on the one hand it is only 12 seconds... Bard Man declarses this spell to be on the very edge of imba. Oh and just lose the Auto cast of your first spell. Nobody is gonna kill this S.O.B. in 12 seconds, no matter how much they've been fed.


Sidenote: Goodluck with your fiction. Hope it turns out great. 8)

Ok. I looked, I saw, I thought *imba, imba, imba*. But its cool. And you've already rebalanced it in your comment there, that looks great down there. Well. Down from where I am now - up once I post. Sue me. Anyway, fix all that up, and you get 10/10.

You tried to balance it, very good. But not good enough seeing as you can overcome this with the right items. Do what you were going to do with the rebalancing.

As said above, good luck with your fiction. Lol @ flying through wall...

Hmm, I see all your good points in the comments, and I think I will edit my balancing issues.

1st ability: No bonus attack damage. Attack speed increases 5,10,15,20 percent. Half all the stun times and add 10 second for each level of cooldown.

It basicly now is a healing spell that heals 120 hp, and a little redemption. The attack speed increase will be good at last hitting or chipping away a hero's health. I don't need I need to change my first fix. But mana cost will be 75/90/105/120.

2nd ability: 0.5, 0.7, 1.0, 1.2 seconds. Initial damage is 75/100/125/150. Bonus damage is +10/18/25/33 per unit. Veneturers damaged by 25/50/75/100

Yes, I should put a maximum on this, would you say at most 5 bonus damage?

3rd ability: Hotkey S, activatable ability. Lasts 7 seconds and cooldown of 45 seconds at all times. Self bonus armor increase is 1.5/2.5/3.5/4.5, her armor increase does not stack up with her aura. But lasts 7 seconds and has a long cooldown. Mana cost 100/115/130/145

OK, I totally agree with bardman on this one, I'll just kick out self increase (Which by the way I noticed just now, HUGE imbalancing there) and return it back to being an aura.

Ulti: hp's are 500/1025/1500, lasts 10 seconds, has no armor, only one charge of creep nuke at all levels, has set damage and is not effected by Nakkara's items. Attack speed is 1.35 at all levels. Dodge is 10/15/20 % and critical is x1.5. Nacharius heals 15%, 30%, 45% of what he inflicts.

OK, new issues, Nachariatic blast has an AOE radius of 250. His attack is not 45-55, 65-75, 75-85. And about that auto cast eternal love pact, I think I'm gonna keep it, I mean she is gonna miss Nacharius after all :D

overpowered for me. really, it needs lots of balancing.

I think it would be easier overall to just implement the changes and let us critique it from there, I can't quite get it in the comments.

Whatever the '5 bonus damage' is, surely thats a typo. You mean a cap of 500 or something, right...? (For the nuke?) I am kinda lost.

Again, just implement the changes and let us look then.

WOW i fukin love the concept.... very well thought up

however....
GOT OVER POWERED?!?!?!?!?!?!
blance it out please :P

Yes, that is basicly it. MAximum of 5 bonus damages, so if it is 8 units, damage will be dealt like there was 5 units in the area.

I'll implement the changes whe I have the time, maybe tonight.

Ahhhh, cap of damage-from-five-units, got it.

Yes, now with the changes you are posting, it's really starting to look good, now, put 'em there!
No seriously, it's a good idea....

imba bodoh

imba mbah darmo wekekekekekekekekek

Changes look fine. Theres still some typos and wrong images etc, but now I'll let you have my 10/10.

(Typo: Nachariatic Blast lvl2; should do 400 to creeps and 250 AOE, not the other way around)
(Typo: Sven with a V)
(Wrong image/name: you have "|Mjollnir image| Eye of Skadi: (6760)" I think you meant to say Mjollnir there... or the other way around?)

That is all. I think. Those things aren't thaat important.

Oh, sorry. It was supposed to write Mjollnir, not Skadi. Well, if anyone does a major suggestion and I decide to make her that way, then I will fix the typo's as well. Right now I'm trying to come up with another hero idea. So do not hold back your comments.

I figured as much. Why waste time with something like that when theres bound to be something else popping up in another coupla days anyway? My Techies guide now has three reasons to be updated and I still need to deal with one of them properly (this one being playing Puck more than zero times to see how Puck and Techies work). More reasons will come I am sure.

i love this character it will become my favourite once the release her

whn are new chars goin to b release

very nice no comment

For Kinetic Chaos skill:
- Does venturers get damaged only once when they entered the aoe?
- What is the cast range?
- Is the aoe centered on the hero or the target?
- Does any enemy unit that enter the aoe get slowed for 3 seconds the moment they enter or after they leave/spell expires?
For Ghost of Nacharius
- What is the movespeed of Nacharius?
- i think that the "lifetransfer" is still abit too much since the hero is agi hero, lifesteal with tt is crazy

Kinetic Chaos (C)
Nakkara reaches to her telekinesi and unleashes a tremendous amount of power. Slams an enemy unit and tosses it around. The unit will take initial damage and extra damage for every unit inside an area of effect. Enemy units that enter the area will be damaged as well. Slows attack and movement speeds by %20 for 3 seconds at all levels. Channeling. Disables Eternal Love Pack when channeling. If channeling is interrupted by an external force, Nakkara recieves 100 damage and a 225 range knockback. AOE cannot include the Power Lich or her illusions inside. 450 casting range. Cap of total 6 bonuses to main target from venturers.
Level 1 - 75 initial damage, +10 damage for every unit in an AOE of 150. Damages venturers by 25 HP. Lasts 0.5 seconds. Costs 150 mana. (135 damage max)
Level 2 - 100 initial damage, +18 damage for every unit in an AOE of 200. Damages venturers by 50 HP. Lasts 0.7 seconds. Costs 180 mana. (208 damage max)
Level 3 - 125 initial damage, +25 damage for every unit in an AOE of 250. Damages venturers by 75 HP. Lasts 1 seconds. Costs 220 mana.(275 damage max)
Level 4 - 150 initial damage, +33 damage for every unit in an AOE of 300. Damages venturers by 100 HP. Lasts 1.2 seconds. Costs 250 mana. (348 damage max)
A nuke, the only nuke to be exact. It is solid and good but high mana cost. So it's kinda not imba.
Mana Cost: 150/180/220/250
Cooldown: 25

- Does venturers get damaged only once when they entered the aoe?
Yes, I forgot to write the little things, this is one of them.
- What is the cast range?
The cast range is 450. And minimum range is 200, since Nakkara cannot be in the kinetic chaos.
- Is the aoe centered on the hero or the target?
The AEO is centered on the target.
- Does any enemy unit that enter the aoe get slowed for 3 seconds the moment they enter or after they leave/spell expires?
The moment they come in, like epicenter.

Ghost Of Nacharius (R)
Nakkara punishes the Abandoner for his absence by tempororaly summoning him to aid by her side. Lasts 10 seconds. Does not have any armor. Eternal Love Pact cannot be cast at this time. Nacharius heals Nakkara for the damage he inflicts. He can cast Nachariatic Blast(S) once and has Telekinetic Mastery. Abilities grow stronger by the level. Nacharius is unaffected by Satanism aura. If Nacharius dies before he expires, automatically activates Eternal Love Pact. Has an attack speed of 1.35 at all levels.
Level 1 - Nacharius has 500 HP, 450 range, 70-80 damage. Telekinetic mastery allows 10% dodge, 15% of x1.5 crtical. Nachariatic Blast damages heroes and buildings by 100 HP and creeps by 250 HP in a radius of 250 AOE. Heals Nakkara for %15 of the damage inflicted.
Level 2 - Nacharius has 1025 HP, 500 range, 85-90 damage. Telekinetic mastery allows 15% dodge, 15% of x1.5 crtical. Nachariatic Blast damages heroes and buildings by 100 HP and creeps by 250 HP in a radius of 400 AOE. Heals Nakkara for %30 of the damage inflicted.
Level 3 - Nacharius has 1500 HP, 550 range, 90-100 damage. Telekinetic mastery allows 20% dodge, 15% of x1.5 crtical. Nachariatic Blast damages heroes and buildings by 100 HP and creeps by 600 HP in a radius of 250. Heals Nakkara for %45 of the damage inflicted.
Ulti, summons Nacharius. She misses her when he is gone before his time :D Very good finishing, healing, hunting spell.
Mana Cost: 250
Cooldown: 120

- What is the movespeed of Nacharius?
Good question, either 310 or same movespeed as Nakkara, I haven't thought about it :D
- i think that the "lifetransfer" is still abit too much since the hero is agi hero, lifesteal with tt is crazy
Well, I think 10 seconds of a summoned unit can do so much. BTW, the creep killing nuke of the summon does not heal Nakkara. Nacharius has main uses, heal Nakkara, stop a creep wave and get the occasional hero kill. So I tdon't think it is too imba.

Thanks for all your comments. BTW, I could really answer to yours well if I knew what tt was :D

very nice idea

pretty cool

awesome, cept the green lasers lol, make it more evil litchy not so scifi

9/10

I'll think about that, you may be right but still not a major change.

i would play her if i could...

If this hero actually comes out in Dota.. ppl would goin crazy over it.. kinda imba in my opinion.. the skills could do with a bit of toning down or maybe a longer cooldown.. but cool idea btw...

The balance in this hero is in that abilities have drawbacks

-You are vulnerable when you use your nuke
-You aura turns off when you are pacting
-Nacharius needs micro.

Aw! i think i got headache. This hero is hard to understand, yet i liked her story looks creepy!!! I didnt quite understood "Eternal Love Pact" and how would she look, will she be a customed hero or as any unit in tft?

She would be a custom model but modified from normal TFT models. Like Azwraith or swen. She would be lina inverse, black hair and a lich's robe.

Eternal love pact increases her attack speed and gives her a regeneration. Like a 10 sec tango and fervor for a limited amount of time. The real thing s, when you feel like you are about to die you cast it and the enemy who kills you is stunned for a period for you ally to finish it off. Chances are, fighting nakkara, you will have low hp. And if it is like 100hp vs 100 h fight and you lose, you still get the kill due to damage.

The thing about this hero is she is quite good at ganks as the creeps can be cleared by a little factor by GoN and her kinetic chaos damage depends on units near. In a gank war, eternal love pact slays your assailant (stun is basically free kill) and satanic aura helps your allies in the gank.

is that a void stone or a hyper stone?? well whatever... the skill 3 is IMBA

OK, I'll clean up the mistakes when I can.

May I ask, why imba? -2 arnor is not that much and +2.5 is not picnic either.

far 2 imba omg

Well, the hero was nerfed to the level they were asked to and if you can't see it, the biggest problem with this hero is Fing low int gain per level, so you can't spam any spell you got.

And would you mind saying why is it imba?

don't understand,,really

Nice job! Everyone, please realise that its not imba solely because you can only have...wait for it...ONE SPELL ACTIVE (at a time, except for while ulti is cast i think)! Thats SO NOT IMBA! Although, a refresher orb would so help in hero killing...

OK, thank you, I got tired of saying that over and over.

BTW, suppose you get refresher, (Going with the build BoT, Guinsoo, Refresher, AC, Stygian, Mjollnir) max mana at kevek 25 you gonna get is 962. 250+250+275+250+150=1170 (Assuming you're talking about Kinetic Chaos doubled and one ghost of nacharius, since there can only be one nacharius at a time and you have to have mana left for eternal love pact as a n escape and redemtion mechanism) you are still 208 mana short of which I am sure you cannot regenerate over that amount of time.

So I don't think it would work but thanks for adressing to those noobs.

Reasons why this hero is not imba;
-Max base intelligence you can have is 49! You base max mana is 637! Your nuke and ulti mana cost is 2501 Your first spell cost is 150!
-Every Ability disables others. No combos.

She is not a mage! She is an attacker.

thats exactly the point why this hero is imba. its no caster - so its an attacker with insane spells... see what i mean? base mana is low? well how about arcane ring?...

pretty cool i guess, however too much detail, like really really detailed :), and kind of imbalanced don't you think? Ghost Of Nacharius is really imbalanced in my opinion, overall it's "ok"..

OK, elp is to stun enemy when you are dying or escape. So it is not THAT much of an insane thing.

KC has a 25 sec cooldown, it costs 250 mana! You would only use it to secure a kill or stop a creep wave! Good damage but not spammable.

Again, high mana cost, only 12 seconds, 120 sec cooldown. This means you can only haev hime 10% of the time. He is not THAT overpowered.

Her int gain is +1.2! She is not imba!

Oh, btw, arcane ring in one iinstance will not fill enough mana for a successful cast of a spel :D so you're much better with guinsoo.

What items do you buy when you just started playing?

Well, double bracers of cource. Then get BoT. If you got a lot of nukers or having trouble keeping your health up, geta vanguard or a hood of defiance.

Hey a creepy fella, you know what I mean? Satanist hero! I have a clarification for the ultimate, from your story, you said, she longs or she's waiting for Nacharius, but her ultimate can summon him? Why?

OK, here is the thing, NAcharius is a time/space traveller, he goes from world to world, forms a cult that seems to be good and converts fanatics (the ones that are the most evil and good) to his side (it is done by etheral nachariath, long story) then he destroys the world. The power of his followers come from him and he can only have one cult at a time. But, these cultists, although they started from Nacharius's own powers, develop magic powers on their own. But the eternal love pact they have to make then turns on them, killing them and absorbing all their energies into nacharius.

Nacharius then realises that true power does not come from being completely evil, but from understanding and being in power equilibrium, both light and evil. SO he becomes an expath (still another long story) basicly someone who seeks for knowledge that is eternal. (science, not emotion) When he became an expath, he gained tremendous power, but became apathetic to his old ways.

Nakkara was from the last cult, Nacharius did not even bother absorb the energies of the last cult. The love pact makes every one of his followers to love him, and now they hate his abandoning. Nakkara can bend space-time through her telekinesi being gravitation (this is kuantum physics) and summon him, wherever he may be. After a while, he leaves. But this is only temporary, and Nakkara longs for a permanent return, that he may be willing to stay, that her fake love was not one sided.

So there is the story. Hope you like it. It is after the first saga ends, so I am a LONG way there. I need to write 20 more chapters and finish the initial universe.

are you know man?i not tell but this my favorite hero of hero ideas.I WANT HER AT DOTA

bro needs more balancing regarding the skills... specially in the skill kinetic chaos... hmmmmmmm...


note its void stone and not hyperstone that regenerates your mana

Yeah, but it is balanced. Look at mana cost, pool'n stuff. You wont be able to spam it early on and when you get the skill, the damage becomes insignificant so the only use is the disable it gives.

BTW, thanks for the admiration :D

nice really like it

noooo bad hero!!! ugly idea!! its BS!!!

yeah like this very much,no comment.
can't wait to use this hero!
good job!

cool

Nce... The first skill's sacrifice balances most of it... but try weakening some of the skills...

i like the idea with the ulti i just think its a bit weak, only lasts 10 seconds.

its relatively good at beginning but late game it becomes useless.

u should maybe make his hp a % of powerlich's hp and allso the dmg a % of powerlich's dmg.

Maybe make it last for 30 secs

Then the ulti will allso be good at late game.

i like the idea with the ulti i just think its a bit weak, only lasts 10 seconds.

its relatively good at beginning but late game it becomes useless.

u should maybe make his hp a % of powerlich's hp and allso the dmg a % of powerlich's dmg.

Maybe make it last for 30 secs

Then the ulti will allso be good at late game.

Or, I can make it chaos/pure damage and increase the damage. But a good idea, I will think bout it.

I think if u make it chaos or pure it will be to good for early game.

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balance it .>>
the skills are good.
whooh its so powerful maybe it would go beyond Godlike even if a noob is using it... try to make it better in terms of skills try to balance

balance it .>>
the skills are good.
whooh its so powerful maybe it would go beyond Godlike even if a noob is using it... try to make it better in terms of skills try to balance

For items you write hyperstone (900) but that is a void stone and defanition is for void stone so change the name hyperstone.

good.. id say that ulti is kinda imba but how much nacharius blast does damage? anyway good hero idea.

its a void stone not hyperstone